great story please continue

Good start to the story. One typo I saw was in the 6th or 7th paragraph down: "Did he do this to him?" should be "Did he do this to her?" ... unless Tali is a dude in your fic (which I hope to hell not - that'd be creepy)

Otherwise not bad. I like it
-Beo

I use a app on my iPad to read the fan fiction stories off of the site sadly I can't leave reviews though the app but I can follow them as alerts AKA when you update them I get a notice saying they were updated so I read it that way.

Great story so far; keep up the good work!
I think your portrayal of the characters is pretty spot-on. I especially love the interaction between Shepard and Tali; you seemed to have captured their relationship perfectly! Tali's purring melts my heart every-time. :)
Zaeed turning traitor was a shock, but not unreasonable. He's a mercenary and is only loyal to the highest bidder, so it makes sense that he'd betray Shepard for Cerberus.
Overall, Excellent job! I look forward to reading the rest of the story!

Nice job on this chapter

Nice job on this chapter!

Nice job on this chapter!

Nice chapter u did good with the action/battle scenes. Can't wait to read more.

Nice job on this chapter!

Samara and Legion seemed a bit OOC here... In my opinion...

Ok. I will wait for more Tali Shepard interaction...

Ha... Loved the last part...

Nice job on this chapter!

Why is Reegar there?

Pretty good so far. Could use a bit more detail, but other than that it's pretty good. One thing, though; Tali's passphrase is "After time adrift among open stars,along tides of light and through shoals of dust, I will return to where I began."