I kind of like this, please continue?

Could there join gaara village

this us nice

This is great way better than last chapter

Hey, I checked out your stories before I responded to your review and I like how this one turned out so far, I'll be waiting for the revised version of it. Good luck

Hey I just finished reading the story and other than a few spelling errors(not trying to be rood I'm just super O.C.D. sorry.) it's great, and I was wondering if you were just going to change the chapters or if you wrote an entirely different story. If so, I'd love to know the name and continue reading this great story.

I will be blunt here so I apologize in advance if anything I type upsets you. m(_ _)m
I know people like to make their own changes to the cannon, just to give it their own twist or make it how they would like it to be written.. However I'm tired of seeing it.

You have been given the whole world of Naruto to play with... How about something no one has seen before, use the characters, use the world, but try to put a new spin on something that has been used over time and time again to make it your own. It really does not matter if you follow the original plot or not if your story is well written...

You have missed your capitalization on a few of your sentences, you have forgotten punctuation on a fair few of them too. You must remember spaces too, take the last line in 'chapter one' for example; "Thank you old man for everthing,"naruto said and with that said he and Sakura both turned and ran from the village and off into the night.

I would have done something like this: "Thanks old man." Naruto turned to have one last look at the village.

"Thank you for everything." Sakura said bowing before she took Naruto's hand, together they turned their backs on the village and ran down the road, the darkness of the night swallowing them up swiftly.

Or something along those lines... No offense, but I won't be continuing to read this story.

Talena, a member of Critics United.

This is complete garbage and I don't know why you posted it.

Go back to school and really pay attention this time.

fuckin fgt, both u and mr grimjaw suck, who cares about your personal problem u emo fgt

Sorry for your Grandfather man.
I would like to express my sincere condolences to you and your family

condolences

I wouldnt mind if you took your time coming back to story writing, glad to hear he is going to be alright. Spend a little time with him, so that when you come back, you will be at full fighting strength. :) 3
RinnyWolf

That's a great news about your grandfather. Also glad about you continuing your work

congratulations on your grandfather getting better update soon

Hope everything become back to normal again