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I loved the plot twists... Please continue the story... You are an amazing writer!

HEY BUDDY (AIRWATCHER)YOUR STORY IS TOO GOOD YOU SHOULD HAVE ONLY ADDED LITTLE BIT MORE LOVE SCENES BETWEEN ASH AND MAY TO MAKE THE STORY MORE INTERESTING THAT'S ALL OTHER THAN THAT I FEEL YOUR STORY IS AWESOME AS IN LIKE IT DESERVES A 20 OUT OF 10 TOTALLY LOVE YOU STORY PLEASE IF YOU GET THE TIME TRY AND WRITE SOME MORE STORIES!( YOUR 1 AND ONLY TRUE BUDDY SEAN NATHAN LEWIS) (THANKS FOR YOUR STORY!)

Fuck Tobias he is the bitch who has to have legendaries fight his battles against normal pokemon, so if anyone is pathetic it was him and the fact that Ash did not call him on it seems like lazy writing. Also no, just..no Max is in no fucking way capable of catching Lugia or even seeing one. The only legendary that he could maybe have is Jirachi, cause Deoxys is too stubborn to battle for a trainer. Also wtf, why is Max who was a moron and knew dick about training suddenly after a short time such an OP trainer and able to destroy the elite four with using his whole team and then take out 2 of Ash's pokemon when Ash only used one to defeat the elite 4. Oh yeah, you gave Max a Metagross, one of the rarest Pseudo legendaries out there and he just happens to have one when there are like 3 or 4 trainers who have one in the whole world. while the idea is good the first chapter just did not do it for me.

Airwatcher i really like your fan fic and i know you don't have the time to make more fan fics its a little sad you don't continue your story but i wish you the best and good luck on your studies, i have the feeling that you will be a good journalist.
p.s: your fiction reader

Good riddance

What hell kind of crap where you smoking when you wrote this garbage

Great Fight, but what doesn't make sense is that why does Raichu have 6 moves? He used Thunderbolt, Volt Tackle, Quick Attack, Electro Ball. Then you had 2 artificial moves called Lightning Lance and Electro Cannon. Is this created by another move or something?

Boo! No Ash/may its the 2nd worst ash ship with the least amount of proof except ash/Iris it goes iris may dawn misty Serena In terms of likelyhood!
But f cking amazing story!
except Ash's Gible was male?

Take out the may/ash scene at this time ash/misty is better but ash/Serena is the best out of them all!
I'm also really enjoying this series but Ik that garchomp is male not female and is immune to electric attacks so it should have beaten electivire.

Its great but i want MORE

Normal type

Nice chapter. Liked the ash and mat scene

Love the fanfic but can u have ash train Barry I think Barry would be a good strong trainer

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