I wish this was longer. I would love to see the further progression of their relationship.

Steamy and cute, but I wish it was longer and went into the next morning at least. Thank you for sharing

I LOVE IT

can anyone say intense erotic mind blowing
did i say intense i think i did WOW
definitely could read some more chapters of this

This is beyond cute and hot! It would be amazing if one day you came back with an outtake of Embry letting this memory slip in the pack mind and Quil/Paul get jelly. Very well done btw!

Now this really deserves an epilogue, great story x

Forget changing I'm taking a very, very, very looong COLD shower.

Cringe worthy

aww that was so sweet and hot

I read it a while back, but couldn't help and read it again. For such a short story it sure is intense. You managed a lemon that was sensual but not vulgar. The way you described their impressions and reactions was proof that sometimes less is more. It doesn't always has to be graphic with countless positions. Instead you described the 'torture' in detail and described the 'main course' more through their feeling and the sensations invoked. It was refreshing. The scene with Jake was priceless, Seth's comments awesome and her relationship with Leah perfect. I always like it when those two are friends in fiction. I loved this Embry, all sexy voice and dominance but still not afraid to let her take charge. And you're right: when he said "I can't let you go" I was a goner. Who doesn't want to hear that (as long as it isn't said by a stalker or insane boyfriend of courseI would love to read more about this Embry and the improved Bella.

I loved this story so much,so intense, and i look forward to the rest.

Sure a sequel will work, but continuing this story would be better. Definitely needs to be continued though. DANG! My heart melts for this Embry!

Love it. Welcome back.

Excellent.

L