Fuk

I did not enjoy reading this and here's why:
1. If Danny's life was immediately threatened and nobody was in sight but his attacker it would have obviously been the smartest thing to either reveal his powers or use them in some surreptitious way to escape easily. Although this happened with people hired, Danny could have also escaped Brad by turning himself intangible for a second in order to slip away. I realize this part of the story was put in so Dash could save Danny but you could've easily had their relationship progress in some other way. Also it would have been veeery easy for Danny to avoid getting kicked out of school by not fighting the people who attacked him by finding out their names, possessing each of them, and ruining their lives...so the whole "kicked out of college" thing was easily avoidable.
2. There were SO many grammar errors and almost all of the dialogue seemed very awkward. I really should have documented each one I noticed as I went along so I apologize, but citing specific examples now would take an obscenely long amount of time. There were tense switching errors. point of view switching errors, spelling errors, comma errors, run on sentences, and multiple fragments and incomplete sentences.
3. Danny and Dash are both so incredibly immature. If Danny really wanted Dash's taking advantage of him to stop he would have at least attempted to have a civil conversation with him instead of rolling over and taking it, don't you think? It seems the only time Danny's willing to really stand up for himself is when his aggressor is obviously weaker than him. Case in point: Miranda. Additionally if Dash was really so in love with Danny why wouldn't he at least attempt to be nicer in some way more substantial thank making him food? *By the ending of the story Dash's is protective of Danny even though in the past he caused him so much harm.
4. Both Dash's father and Dash's cousin immediately take to calling Danny "Fenton" I don't understand why because they were never told that he preferred this nickname or given any other reason to do so...
5. The story behind Vlad's involvement with Pain and Palsy just seemed so flimsy, "Oh, I accidentally made this ghost addicted to the emotions of half ghosts...Sorry bro. Alsoooo instead of going to talk to you myself I am going to send this CRAZY, EMOTION-STARVED GHOST AFTER YOU INSTEAD!." That just screams red flag to me and I would assume that Vlad would have been much smarter than that
6. Kwan's involvement with Vlad just seemed so unnecessary
7. Its never explained HOW exactly Mr. Baxter so quickly arranged to have 4 or more hit men capture and assault his son's boyfriend. The speed with which he arranged Danny's attack seems more than slightly unrealistic.
8. Dash's "reaction" or rather lack thereof was underwhelming to say the least.
Although my overall impression of this work is bad, there were some parts that were better than subpar. For example Tucker and Paulina's relationship, *Dash's (although slightly hypocritical) protection of Danny, and a very limited amount of the humor within the story. Your rating is 5/10

danny Phantom has vanished from the picture :C

Lots of slut shaming in this fic so far, and now you've added a boyfriend pressuring for sex :/ It's not a bad fic, but I feel like I need an "I need feminism because..." post after this lol I get that Danny's okay with it, but "You better not back out" sounds...well, have you ever been pressured for sex like that? It's not a nice feeling, even if you're willing.

Pretty cute story. I do have a few comments though:
1. You made Danny a bit too weak. Sure he can't use his power in fear of exposure, but that does not mean he can be taken down just like that.
2. Needs more development on Vlad's turnaround and Danny's coming out to his parents. It just seemed skipped.
3. looks a bit too one dimensional.

Definitely loved story this, thanks for the good read.

Please do more

PLEASE ADD SEX SCENES (*w*) PLEASE!

Smut please? D:

Oh my God...that's the first thing I could think of, this story is...in one word Amazing...I couldn't put it down every chance I got I read more and more of it...I'm curently on vaction in the woods at a camp ground and Wifi and cellphone signal is vary scarce so when I ever I got signal I instantly got online and loaded a new chapter...it is just so, unique. I mean every stroy you find on here is Danny or Dash confessing there love to each other and then going somewhere to have sex (not that that is bad I like smut...its actually what I look for lol) but your story was different...25 chapters I read in 2 days of having almos f2f no internet...btw I hate reading...so know that to get me to put tbis much effort into reading your story it had to be absolutely Amazing. Sorry if I'm typjng to much I just loved this story so much I can't wait to read what happnes next

Awww! I loved it the ending was a tiny bit unsatisfying but I loved it none the less!

KWAN!? Oh my frog, plot twist

holy shit man. holy shit!

this is great XD

I can't believe it's over! _ NoOOOOOOooOoooOOOOooooOOooo