So I finally finished reading this story to the end, cause ya know it used to be one of my favs. I’ll probably go back and skim here and there and leave more reviews. But I’m sad to say...I don’t actually like this story. Not necessarily Telgte plot you have going, cause I like that well enough. It’s more like your character Marina. She’s whiny, an mopey overgrown child and honestly she should have died about her first battle. She can’t fight, all she does is cry and scream at people for no real justification and she’s encredible selfish and biased. Which is actually the ONLY things I do like about her. I do NOT however like how you phrase and frame it in the story. The villagers of Rohan are RIGHT to be angry. Brain KILLED someone. A guard who has had numerous bad experiences with Wargs. Wargs are seen to be evil and I love how Marina is supposed to find the good in braig and make her her companion; but you completely demonized the villagers. Marina thinking that way is fine as they are directing their anger on her and no one is able to take hate like that regardless who’s in the wrong, HOWEVER, Your writing and narrative puts the blame on the villagers. Making them seem simple minded and petty. Which they are not. That’s was someone’s husband who is never going to come home, that is someone’s father who will never play with them again. That is someone’s Legolas.

Moving on.
She’s weak. It wasn’t until she got these powers of hers that she completed her Mary Suedom. Those powers don’t make her strong and she barely used them responsibly. She turned Thranduil into a cat instead of acting like an adult and negotiating. She slams Haldir into a wall because he ‘hurt her’ like and? Your sparring? He’s trying to help her and she responds by throwing YET ANOTHER tantrum. This is a trend. When Aragorn attempts to get her on a horse she whines and says she can’t (despite having been on one a short while ago) and then screamed at him, in another bratty fit, that “DID YOUR BROTHER DIE?! Excuse me for-“blah blah blah, whine whine whine pity meeeee. Is all I heard. I was honestly so glad you followed it up with Aragorn snapping back at her. I was like “ah yes common sense and they-really-dont-have-time-for-this finally kicked in” I would have left her lothlorien. I still to this day do not understand why it wasn’t even brought up.

Moving on

No matter what she does and how stupid and childish she’s behaving everyone grovels in the bellies to win back her favor like I’m sorry? She never learns when she’s in the wrong and doesn’t grow at all as a person.
And she is STUPID. Like I can’t? What makes you think a game of hide n sex BAREFOOT through a malevolent forest of unknowns is a good idea? And then, she decided with all her supposed nurse knowledge that POPPING the white growths on her feet was a good idea? Even in basic Health class we’re taught popping blisters or sores filled with pus is a big no no as it could get infected. She’s A Certified NURSE and she did something so stupid? Especially in an unknown realm where advanced healthcare is not a thing?
Oh but it’s ok because yet again her party has to clean up after her dumb decisions. She didn’t even help with the wounded, so much for being a ‘healer’

Moving on

EVERY GUY IS LITERALLY FALLING OVER-THEMSELVES FOR HER. Every main highly desired character that makes an appearance anyway. Haldir, Boromir, random dudes; I was actually shocked when Aragorn didn’t even have the slightest thought about her.

Moving on

She is ridiculously over dependent and spiteful for no good reason other than childish petulance. She writes a note to Legolas KNOWING it would upset him when he had trials he needs to face and can’t run to over so she can stand behind him and swoon as he plays the tough husband and beats up Haldir and Gandalf.

Screams out for Legolas when about to be raped by Uruk. This one I’m just annoyed by personally and doesn’t actually take a ton away. Mainly because it fall right into the “SAVE MEEE PLEASE OHHH HANDSOME LOVE INTEREST PLEASE GO APESHIT IN A MANLY DISPLAY OF LOVEEE”
But that’s about it for that one. Knowing she can’t fight them off, calling for help is her best bet.
She honestly should have been dead.

Moving on

She plays the victim and “I’ll cryyyy” card so much it might as well be stamped to her forehead. It’s not myyyy fault th meardas died! I was protecting braig! Uh huh. Braig who slaughtered foals-baby horses, and Mares who did ABSOLUTELY nothing. Defending from Shadowfax? Understandable and it makes sense. The other one? Ah hah. No. I feel like what braig did was literally just to make a big deal about her powers. That’s how little sense it makes. But nooo it’s not her fault! Never!

Point:
She’s an overgrown, child who has only lived so far because plot armor and her being a Mary Sue. Sorry.

But it is a good lighthearted story. One I once used to love very much. The issue is that I’ve grown, and this story did not grow with me. It comes from a time in my life where I wanted to believe good guys got the perfect girls and yes there was fighting but it was ok because true love.
It’s not like that. And reading about stuff like that has become, dull and boring and annoying. Fics now need not just good writing but characters that grow , that aren’t perfect and don’t model this stereotype that Marina fell into.
I sincerely believe that given a redo and some in depth detail Marina could become an amazing character that actually has depth.
Right now, imma toss her into the nearest incinerator and just think back on this fic in sort of fascinated horror and amusement.

Thank you for the journey though, and I hope you continue to write and thrive and grow!

Oh...she is suuuuch a marry I’m still enjoying it. It is a well written Marry sue kinda

So dramatic lol

Oooh so much drama

D: i was still shocked Boromir was not saveddd

Oh I see how it is Aragorn. Boromir freies to shoot his shot and it’s a no no. Legolas on the other hand. Smh biased!

Ah, Already in love with her by the second chapter lol. I’m re-reading this with new eyes

sorry but all I can see is Ricky from H2O but with black hair with this attitude ngl

I totally miss this story! I checked out the reviews and noticed some real rude people making some horrible comments about it. I just want to say that you're doing a great job! They've got nothing better to do than to sit behind their computer and make rude comments. Very pathetic. Maybe next time they can sign in and post instead of doing it anonymously. Keep your head up and I look forward to reading more when you get the time to update!

Marina is such a Mary Sue. Its not her beauty thats annoying but rather the sanctimonious, "sweetness" of her character. She is so horribly selfish and overly emotional that it makes this difficult to read. Pathetic is a word that sums her up completely.

What is wrong with you? this chapter is sick which says a lot for its writer. "Sweet and compassionate"? To allow such a repulsive thing to happen to creatures as harmless and innocent as foals is utterly disgraceful.

The story is quite good, however, Marina is such a victim - it's pathetic. Far too much crying and relying on others.

Hi, I think your story is very creative, I really enjoy reading it. Did you write any other stories? I'd love to read them! I think your story meets professional quality. My favourite part is definitely Kitty Thranduil. It's funny and sweet. Plus the fact that in the movies, the King of Mirkwood wouldn't be as pleased as the one in this story for being turned into a cat is funny too! But, Tauriel isn't that bad is she? I like her and in the movies she is a kind elf who fights for the freedom of Mirkwood. I understand this is your fanfiction and it's not exactly like the movies, I like your idea very much! I'm just saying what I think of movie tauriel. Thank you for writing this story, please keep writing!
Emma

I like this story, but I have to be honest, I hate your OC. I swear, I feel like she’ll bust into tears if someone calls her a butthead. I can tell her character is meant to be strong, but I don’t see it. At all. She attaches to people immediately, then cries her heart out like she’s known them for 20 years. I mean, it’s fine if you like characters with a bleeding heart, but I personally don’t. The only strength she’s shown at all so far is telling Legolas off for saying she was his. That’s it. She went insane of the townsfolk for laughing at her because, well...she WAS fumbling all over the place, face planting on the ground constantly and falling off a horse. So, she cries and goes screaming, yelling at the entire town? Good Lord.

Also, I’m HIGHLY questioning her intelligence. She does dumb things constantly. For instance, taking her shoes off and injuring herself for the sole purpose of tricking Legolas? And now, she’s ran into battle to tell Legolas (who’s fighting for his life) that she loves him? Her self preservation instincts seem to be absent, along with all logical thinking. She just doesn’t seem to think, and has ZERO thoughts to the outcome of her actions. It’s really frustrating.

With that being said, I like where you’re going with the story. It’s humorous and enjoyable overall. It’s also well written. So, kudos for that. I’m not trying to be unpleasant at all, but I had to finally express my frustrations with this OC. Other than that, you’ve done a wonderful job and I do love how you’ve portrayed Legolas’ personality. He’s hard to get right, and you’ve nailed it.

Best of luck with all your future writing!

So here I am again lol, I have read through this wonderful story for the oh maybe 6th time, and it still made me cry, and laugh, and cry some more, my dear sweet Volurin, how i wish and beg of you an update, I'll send cookies! I beg of you!
Karolyne