Why is Percy on a plane?! He knows that it's dangerous for his health to be on a plane. Or in the air in general. Unless he's on Blackjack.

I FEEL YOU ANNABETH
I FEEL YOU

it was going to be a great story! what the hell,girl

Short, like really short, give way more detail

UPDATE PLEASE. I LIKE YOUR PLOT. LIKE REALLY. BUT CAN YOU MAKE THE CHAPTERS LONGER?

can you continue please? I like the story so far

Its a great summary, but the actual fanfic sucks SO bad. It would be good if you actually wrote more than one can find on a pringles can. Try again never.

Okay, so a friend told me about this story. I am personally not a Percy Jackson fan but for this story I made an exception. I actually think this is an adorable idea. You did wonderful. The only thing that seems bothering is how short it was but I am not one to argue. I actually have seen a book with a chapter one sentence long. Anyway, this is very cute. I find this to be a brilliant idea. If you honestly think you did terrible, then I can not change your mind. Just know that you did wonderful and I will be honest, my first story was shorter then this chapter and I still remember it. If you think you need improvement then try again. All these people are only complainers because they didn't get enough of your wonderful idea. There actually mad because you had a wonderful idea but it just seemed so short to them. I think this was perfect, and I will try not to complain. I hope some day you will be able to look back on this story and smile because you know you did great. I hope to see it finished one day. :)

I'll admit, I was only mildly dissappointed when I read that one chapter, but I'll tell that I'm sorry you got all those negative reviews. That's hard, I know. I'm so glad that it's seemed not to bother you as much, though.

They got me thinking though. Why are they there, for instince? Don't we all start out this way? Because I'm still learning and everyone I come across says I'm good, but I don't think so. Plus, I can't think of three stories that started off like this, but became beautiful overtime. I wish we wouldn't just all jump ahead and judge each other, then again I'm one to talk. My point is that in reality, no one's perfect. Not me, not anyone.

I hope you still plan to write once you get through life, because if it makes you happy then go for it. Just a tip, write for yourself, no one else, and if other people just so happen to back you up, then all the better.

Good luck! ;)

I have to agree that my book sucks. I was 12 when I wrote this and honestly I'm struggling with some stuff right now. If anyone wants to take over go ahead. I don't have the strength or the motivation to continue this. Thanks to all those who l liked it anyway.

This is not a chapter. There's no introduction and it's barely ten sentences. You don't care! So delete cause it's crap. I'm sorry to insult you but seriously.

You call that a story

That sucked I mean this is supposed to be a story not getting my hopes up you should give up writing

Talentless dumbass.

This is an awesome spin on a cliche story! Please update! I want to read more!