This story is really excellent so far! The two main characters are nicely fleshed out, and the dialogue is quite engaging. But the plot is definitely the most impressive aspect of the story. I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Wow what a great battle! After having to take a break from fanficition for so long, its great to have something good to come back too. Its a shame this story hasn't really updates since I left.

I really loved the attention to detail in the writing. Everything is so clear and easy to visualize. This is partially due to great descriptions and having grammar that is around 99.5% percent correct.

If I wanted to give one thing to improve it would be variety in the language used. This is well written, but words like "teen" are used a lot.

Regardless, I thought it was a compelling chapter. Alder and Benga both seemed to be in character, but I am not very familiar with Benga to be honest. But like I said, I thought it was a great chapter. This writer is great at writing battle scenes.
Rating 4/5

Wow, so far I'm really liking this story. It's unique, and well written.
I find myself anxiously waiting for what will happen next, something rare for me.
The battles are VERY well done and for that I'm glad. And, I like that the pokemon have actual personalities.
So, good work, hope to see more soon. I wish I could give a better review.
As for X and Y, definitely getting Y, probably gonna use Froakie. Might change depending on evolutions.

In this story the author does a really great job of taking the basics of Black and White 2 and gives them a really original feel so that it feels almost new to us. Proving that you can turn the game plot line into something truly your own. I don't think I've ever seen that done this well before. Things are kept pretty believable too. I wouldn't mind more details about things like the setting though. Still its really worth reading!
Rating 4.5/5

Fantastic battle! Leaves me stoked to see how her bout with Cheren is going to be! Great job with Alder, too, he was like a blend between his anime self and game self (though similar there are differences) and I like that. This story has been excellent so far and I can't wait to see it progress, particularly with the antags.

Wow, this was AMAZING!
I love the way you write battles, there's so much thought that goes into them!
I like the way you tied in the different Pokemon's personalities as well. Personality makes the Pokemon, and I always felt that it shouldn't be disregarded in battle, since Pokemon aren't just robots that follow human orders. The very fact they have natures, characteristics, and favorite flavors proves that.
Alder was amazing, and exactly as I expected him to be from the few interactions I've had via Black. I'm curious to see how Tia will handle Cheren now, and whether her training from Alder will tie into the upcoming match. Wow, you've got me psyched! That doesn't usually happen! :D
I really can't wait for the gym match now! Update soon! :D

Ah, it's a good enough pace so don't worry about it. I'm surprised you used Benga as I don't see him often enough, but it makes the whole Alder fresh and different from BW2 so nice work there. Not much else to say aside from nice work with Tia and I'm beginning to see a nickname pattern for her.

Also I'm thinking Landon isn't so cool with Tia's decision. He seems a lot more quiet and reserved than he did in his debut or even last chapter.

First off I love the Fire Emblem reference-naming the Rufflet Tomahawk, its very fitting if I do say so myself. I have very high hopes for this story. There was nice spelling and grammar here. The characters were alright, but I think the dialogue could be improved to make each character more distinct. I would have appreciated a little more information in the first chapter to set the story up for me, but for the sake of suspense I'll let that slide. It could have been more compelling, but there are some really interesting things happening here and I am looking forward to reading them :)
Rating: 4.5/5

Wow, I like it so far! Very good, and very action-y! Benga seems interesting, those masked goons do too, and so far I have no complaints. :)

I'm not too good at writing decent, well-thought-out reviews, but I'll try! _

I don't think that you're moving too slow. I like those kind of fics. Besides, I think that the slow pace has suited the fic so far. I don't understand why people want to rush adventure fics, since isn't the whole point of adventure fics to immerse yourselves in a wonderful journey? Making it too fast would take away half the fun! _

Urgh...I have no clue where Floccesy or Aspertia are...Definitely need to catch up with the games... I will do that! Someday...XDD

Well, good job so far and I'm glad that you updated! Sorry for missing your earlier update, but I'm glad I caught this one! :D

A little hard to read, but not to bad. I am enjoying this story based. I want to watch the world burn! Let White Forest Burn! Lol

I was going to complain about the quality of your writing, but I read on and you have improved very much. This is an excellent story and I will continue to read and review.

I just love the original feel you've given the BW2 Unova; most people would just rehash the plot, but you've gone and made it into your own story. I also like how you've made the characters: they're real and react believably to the events going on around them.

Keep writing and update soon!

japaneserockergirl

Very nice prologue/chapter one! I'm pretty interested because my prologue and chapter writing style is very similar to yours. Love the large cliffhanger in the end. A dark beginning for a perhaps even darker story. Well done. Feel free to drop by my own Pokemon Fanfic that also has a dark tone to it :)

I will keep reading! SO WRITE! x3

- NN

A good finish to the battle. I'm sort of glad those two weren't quite able to win the battle on their own. All that help and luck they got was fairly justified as well, so, I don't mind too much. Looking forward to what else is in store.

Wow, intense! Definitely intense. I definitely love how both trainers were still so eager to protect the girl while being totally outmatched. Definitely a nice change in pace from the über trainers that sprout up like green trees on this site. Not that there's anything truly wrong with them either, but this story definitely unique!

I like both Tia and Landon. Tia seems pretty spunky, and Landon, while a bit less so, makes up for it in sheer dedication.

I haven't finished my Pokemon Black nor started my Black 2 eheh ; so I'm a bit lost as to the cities, but your story is motivating me to start catching up! XDD

Love the way you immersed us in this world, and definitely looking forward to the next chapter! :)