This was good (especially for a first Hobbit fanfiction)! I liked how close Fili and Kili were, and how scared Thorin and Fili got when Kili was wounded by the Orc. You described their emotions very well! However, I think you exchanged Fili's and Kili's names a few time in your OS, and that was quite confusing... Anyway, thank you for this great One-Shot!

Plz continue I love this

i wanted to like this, but it was very confusing...i think you mixed up kili and fili's names in many places. unfortunately, that made it too jarring to read the whole thing. :(

Great job! That was really good!

Best story ever! Great job!

amazing!

pls continue it was good

Awesomness! I loved this, it was very emotional and caring. I loved the brother-love between Kili and Fili. Very well done, especially for your first ever Hobbit fanfiction.

Very inspirational, very emotional and beautiful! Good work!

Fantastic as always. I love your Hobbit fics! -

Great story.

Amazing!

Love it!

Frowny face for what that ending sentence foreshadows! Not your fault though, it's Tolkien's ;)
Well written, the action was easy to follow and not garbled.
Only thing I noticed (and only because I just corrected myself from doing the same thing a few days ago) was to watch after a quote whether you capitalize the next word or not. "Blah blah blah." he said.
Thanks for the lovely story!

The story just melts my heart!
Love hurt!Kili and caring!Fili :D

I really loved this story. Don't worry, I enjoyed it to the fullmost extent! :)