Wtf hate story's like this when the main character tell all his fucking secrets to people

Awsome so edo Erza is also a perv

When will the rewrite of this story be published?

Please update this story

fuckyou...
seriously fuck you...

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Well, having read the first chapter, I do believe the story has some potential. There are some errors in grammar or words you forgot to write though, and I would have to go extensively over it to find them. I have seen some awkward phrasing in some paragraphs as well.

However, the matter of a god-like character (Naruto, in this case) is iffy. I hope you have someone to pose a challenge to him because, otherwise, this is going to get boring really fast if he can steamroll over everyone without no effort at all. Wish fulfillment is good and all but within feasible limits. Nagato was also supposed to be God-like, you know. I will keep reading to find out, though.

There are some things that don't make sense to me, though perhaps you haven't realized them. First, for the things you say about Akatsuki, the guild would be labeled as a Dark Guild by the Council and I really doubt they would allow them to be seen as a legal one. If I remember correctly, the Council put together a mission the bring down Oración Seis from the Balam Alliance so I don't see why they wouldn't have done the same already with Akatsuki since they really are much more dangerous than Oración Seis.

Jiema wasn't as ruthless as he usually is in the manga, though that may be because there wasn't really a chance for that trait to appear in this chapter. He was oddly dominant in his conversations with Kakuzu, as if asserting his higher standing, too. It just seemed weird: I can only guess Kakuzu has the same personality as in the Naruto series and he certainly would not let Jiema feel in control of the situation. For example, after Kakuzu answered the question, Jiema said they could go then as if he was the one in charge when it should be the other way. I realize it's a small detail at most and I'm nitpicking but it really breaks my suspension of belief.

Speaking of Kakuzu's answer, why would he give away such information so easily? Alliance talks could go FUBAR in any moment and then, Sabertooth would know information that is supposed to be secret.

Moreover, the scene going from Jiema telling the others about the Akatsuki guild to Yukino's introspective thoughts was really awkward and badly done, in my opinion. It just was too sudden. Besides which, no offense meant but the foreshadowing in her thoughts was really obvious and it would take someone mentally retarded not to catch on the fact that Naruto would show up as the leader of Akatsuki.

I don't know about you, but "deep scars on the left side of his face" hardly counts to make someone look gorgeous in physical terms; at least his face and even worse if a headband covers one eye. You basically have a severely scarred one-eyed cyclops. How can that be gorgeous? Unless Yukino likes that type of men... Hm...

And please, a S-rank mission consisting in showing Sabertooth around? For crying out loud... And the same problem as before applies here, what if the alliance isn't formed for some reason or they have a falling out? Serious breach of security here.

Of course, the points I raise could be moot by the end of my reading the other chapters left but I felt it was necessary to state them.

Argh Naruto is disgustingly idealistic fuck tard

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ehh, just based on your very brief description, i think i'll prefer this version. i'll read the new one anyway, if just for the lemons, but i liked the magics and women that naruto had in this one.

some minor flaw.. how can you tell someone is handsome when you can't see their fce..?

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damn i saw this so i started reading it and now i am here and its getting rewritten you should put chapter 6's name as AN so people look at it first

when are you going to update tailess biju

dude great amazing i hope you make more please as soon as possible