Uh-oh.
Great ending. Sorry it took so long to get to the end, but it sure was worth it. Really liked the dialog.

MrW

Wonderful run though the gamut of emotions with a perfect use of CAPS!

The cuts between then and now also flow smoothly, and you have all the humor one could ask for.

Now to see about that last sentence...

That was great. I loved all the adult's warnings to Ron at his little slip up in the story, especially Kim's dad. Dr. D. was one of the funniest parts as Kim was breaking his hands, along with Motor Ed fainting twice. Now, correct me if I'm wrong but does Kim's question to Ron at the end of the story mean that she's pregnant again? If she is is there going to be another story to follow this one?

That was great. I had tears in my eyes when I read about Motor Ed fainting at what he saw. Poor Drakken and his hand, but better its him and not Junior. I can't wait to read the final chapter.

That was great. Its a little surprising that Drakkan and Shego agreed to help. Could they possibly use this against Kim in the future maybe? Its a little sad but I had to look up Kim's villains so as to remember who exactly Motor Ed was. His name sounded familiar but I couldn't picture what he looked like. I can't wait to see what happens next.

That was a great start. I really want to read the next chapter now. I hope everything goes ok for Ron and Kim in the stable.

Nicely done indeed, with just the right mix of zaniness and sentiment, along with some memorable moments with the characters that we've all grown to know and love. Bravo. Good luck with the contest, and thanks for your poem at the end as well.

MA

Your description of Kim's reactions (and her language) during childbirth were absolutely priceless. The star of Bethle... er, Middleton was also a very nice touch, along with Motor Ed being all talk and no action. It figures! Now onto the finale...

MA

Beautiful story,

Very interesting to have it as a story within a story, with occasional turn-backs to the current time.

Great work on having the villains help out, and showing how nice they can actually be.

Keep up the good writing, and good luck in the contest.

Reader101w

Nicely wrapped up. Pain control techniques are supposed to help, but my experience (second hand via my wife) is that there is no dishonor in asking for drugs.

this was very good :D i hope you write more

And so ends a wacky tale of childbirth, the circumstances of the birth and all the unorthodox 'assistance' received and given throughout.

Nice placement of characters in the event, they carried their portrayal very well.

Quite a few things to comment on here alright...

Drakken almost had more than broken hands huh? Nothing like walking into a sitch where estrogen rules the day and finding out you really don't know what fear is until then...

Motor Ed had better be careful of those self-help channels on late night TV, he could end up in something more explosive than...nah, I think he's hit his ultimate stopping point here.

Found Junior surprisingly cool and competent here, I guess playing on the edges gives him a perspective of obliviousness that serves him well. Especially if he's still involved with Bonnie...

Shego may have had a very big soft spot in her heart touched here and I can maybe see the designation of 'Auntie Shego' on the horizon?

But that request of Kim at the end seems to foretell further adventures of the child-birthing kind for our two former heroes... Oy!

Adieu and Happy New Year!

CajunBear73

Very nice. Very nice.
Although I have no idea why Kim asked that last question.
None at all.
Next year Shego's turn?

Boo-Yah to you to SC90, it was a good tale. Nice job.

ST-103

'Bout time I piped in here. Ronnie boy, help was on the way all you had to do was play catch. Kimmie's gonna be tossing them to you. Just don't drop them!

Anyway who wasn't surprised by Ed's eyes rolling up in his head. I think later Kimmie and ole Eddie are gonna have a sparring match.

ST-103