wait you're saying that max lost all his league battles, so what qualifications does he have for challenging a champion? dosent he have to beat the elite 4 first or win a league first?

moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

It's been a year and you still haven't updated

2-bit hack? I say 3-bit hack.

This was a fantastic read well done

(Championship-Melody) is good the only thing that sucks a little is that pikachu abandoned him to but other wise IT'S GOOD! I hope the next chapter(s) come out soon! PLEASE AND THANK YOU!

Yep, pretty sure many are glad May hasn't had kids with Drew.

A rewrite is better than a DC, I like the pairing you have here and what you did to May regarding Manaphy was pure brilliant. I like what you did with Iris being adopted by Delia as well.

But there is many spelling errors and the betrayal was badly rushed and Ash changing his name takes the satisfaction right out of the revenge, there is a reason the name change cliche is hated these days. Also you need to describe the consequences if the traitors actions, anyone can simply say what happened, we want to see it.

All in all, take your time, flesh things out, give the betrayal more weight, give the consequences more detail, show don't tell, maybe dedicate an entire chapter to the misfortune the traitors will have to endure, many writers simply tell the consequences when we readers would much prefer to see it, it gives us more satisfaction knowing that the traitors got what they had coming.

Also, every Pokemon betrayed Ash? Infernape, Bulbasaur, Bayleaf etc etc, no reason what so ever, especially Infernape who we all know was a used and neglected by Paul and then abandoned while it was still injured and hurt. I can't ever see Infernape doing that.

2 more thing's, think both Ursula and Anabel could be Ash's girls? I did a quick recap of this story and I'm pretty sure Anabel would be crushed seeing as how it was the traitors fault that Anabel didn't get a chance, if they didn't chase Ash away he wouldn't of ran into Ursula the way he did, Max and Pikqchu technically is at fault that Anabel's chances were taken from her.

2nd, Would you like and OC? I could offer you an OC if you need him, just in case.

I look forward to your rewrite and thanks for the update, the name is my account so if you want to send me a message then I welcome it.

Well at least it's good to have you back man, thanks for not leaving us all hanging.

Nice story

Please Update! I love this story and i don't want to see it forgotten! Thanks in advance!

I hope everything is okay, we are waiting patiently for the next chapter

When's Ash going to take off his mask and reveal himself?

I'd say Oak with a mentor/student bond.

Good Job. I'm waiting the next chaptet. I liked the appearance of Charizard. I hope the next chaptet explain how Ash recovered Charizard and speak what happened yo the rest of old Pokémon of Ash and Max uses another one apart Pikachu.

I can not wait Pikachu vs Charizard.

Saludos desde México. (Greetings from Mexico)