Here are my 5 questions. 1. I saw the summary for the fanfic. But what else is there to the plot? 2. This takes place during the Junior Cup, during the Unova journey, right? 3. Is the place the Junior Cup is at, the only location to be used in the fanfic? 4. If not, then what other locations are being used? 5. What Pokémon are owned by anyone, mainly the main anime characters, in the fanfic? Be sure to answer these questions.

I hope there will be more chapters for this story because this dosent feel like a proper ending in my opinion

This is amazing! I love this it's everything I would have come up with and more,

Hmm...don't tell me your a SerenaxAsh fan cause i lost all respect for u.

Didnt see that coming. Lol. :P

Doesn't the Orange Island League that he won count?

Tyrantrum makes appearance truly amazing if you pokemon fans know that pokemon resembles a T-rex I mean it looks like one

Great story! Can't wait for the next!

Awesome chapter! Can't wait for you to start the next installment of the story!

good job Paul catching a Tyranitar was amazing

That was a good chapter and nice work taking down the poacher.

This chapter was great! You got Paul's personality down well!

My opinion still stands like a statue,but in this chapter,it left a bitter aftertaste.

I thought Ash and Hilda had an delicate romance for each other,and my opinion still stands,but this story has given a sweet and sour flavour in mouth,there was disappointment and happiness.

The Dawn/Ash moments in the early part of the story felt pointless seeing as how you didn't really go anywhere with it. I mean, yeah, it produced a bonding moment between Dawn and Misty but other than that, that sub plot could have been excluded from this story.

What about Misty and her seeming self esteem issues you touched on with her and the Plasma grunt? That was never tied up. Had potential I'd say.

I know when you get so many important characters together, it can be difficult to give everyone spotlight, but you definitely could have done a better job of giving a few characters more shine. Maybe before the tournament started you could have had filler sections for May, Iris, Paul, and Cilan to shine. Not just by interacting with eachother alone, you did okay with interactions, but involving them actually doing something to advance their goal. Gary also started to feel bland after introducing Fenneken.

Ash has been handled well, but he's hogged way too much of the spotlight. He's battled N, Ghetsis and Red. Ghetsis was fine I suppose but Hilda or Paul should have been the one to battle N. it would have been really interesting to see N evaluate one of those two and battle them and see where that goes.

Trace is a decent character to show off X/Y Pokemon but he also seems rather bland. Maybe since Ash and the gang are heading with him to his final Gym battle you can flesh his character out a little more. Because now he just feels like a plot device. Although, the potential for him to be Ash's main rival for the Unova League is there for sure. I like him better than Trip, that's for sure. It seems a little too convenient that Pancham evolved "off screen". I know that his evoloution was revealed much later but it probably would have worked better to show us how Pancham evolved.

I really like how you wrote the Junior Cup. The battles were good. It was cool to see Misty use a new Pokemon and do pretty well with it. It was clear that the competition in your Junior Cup is more competent than that of the anime's Junior Cup. I like bringing back Katie from the Hoenn League, that showed how good Trace is, a really good battle there. Trip making it to the Semi-Finals might have been a little too much. It would have been more interesting to see Paul vs Trace in the semi finals. However, my favorite element of this story is probably the Hilda/Paul rivalry/relationship. Very well written. Everything from the Ferris wheel to their battle in the q-finals. I love it. There was build up and they pushed each other. The Paul/Ash rivalry was great in DP but obviously we never got to see Paul have his softer side brought out, and Hilda has done that well. Not to the point where it's over done, but it feels believable. Love the Hilda/Paul sub plot and I hope to see more of it.

The Pokeshipping is great, too.

Overall I really like this story. Can't wait to see Butterfree next chapter, yeah let him stick around for the league. I'd like to see either Gible, Corphish, Muk, or Glalie join Ash for the Unova League. The shady guys with the Zapdos, MegaGarchomp and MegaCharizard look interesting. I smell a Team Rocket/Team Plasma arc and I hope those shady guys play a part. I'm assuming the guy with the MegaGarchomp is Benga from the BW2 games? This will be interesting. Great story, keep it up!