Aw, poor family. So much drama. Sad that Sirius died and that Remus is on Dumbledore's side.
There are a lot of grammar, spelling, and punctuation mistakes. Some of them are similar sounding or spelled words such winch/wench, too/to, barrow/borrow, privet/private, etc. I've seen these with authors that warn they have dyslexia and are easy common mistakes. It might help to use a text to speech app that'll read it too you such Voice Aloud or to have a beta.

Liam Nelson? It sounds good together because Liam Neeson is a real name.
Poor Harry. It's kind of hard to accept love from someone that's been horrible to him or tries to kill him. It hurts that they don't love him for his own personality or on his own merit but just because they now know he's theirs or that they hated him just because he was Potter's without ever knowing him.

Oh gosh! I'm happy you didn't rehash the whole conversation from Harry's perspective but skipped to Lucius getting the pensieve. It was getting very frustrating reading basically the same scene twice with just a line or two changed. I'm sure there's a way to just include both of their thoughts in one scene. I was kind of sad there weren't more baby Harry scenes. 6 weeks is a lot of baby holding and cuddle time so they would have a lot of memories of just holding Harry. And it wasn't revealed what they named him at birth from the linebreak letters I think it starts with an L.

Great chapter! The reveal went well and I love that they're just taking out Umbridge immediately.

Ha! I called it. Draco Lestrange. That's interesting.

I jeep just thinking about how Draco fits in and I came to the conclusion that he simply isn't a Malfoy. Or! Maybe he's a Malfoy but like Lucius' brother is Draco's dad. Because unless Harry and Draco are twins, I don't see how they'd have both of them. Plus Severus and Lucius are so sad and it didn't seem like they had more children.

I like this but it is seriously fast paced. Like it reads as though you got overly excited by the plot and just wanted to give everything out quickly. Instead of building up to what they are and who the "mom" is you pretty much spilled the beans by chapter 2. Which, considering this story is only 20 something chapters, makes some sense. But that means there is almost no build up.

This has been a great story! I have very much enjoyed how protective Snape and Lucius are of Harry. I also have never seen a Ron/Harry relationship and that one worked out well too. Thank you

I like the story, but I would have liked to know what happened to Ginny and Hermione...for some reason I don't think they had enough of a presence in the story as the liars and schemers they were...

For one my first languge know ass Gælic had come in handy.
-Killian

um... what's up with the italics?

Personally, I would have asked the twins so that he wouldn't know exactly who put it on him, therefore, no one could find the exact answer in his head so they wouldn't know which twin to put under the imperious curse but then again I'm a paranoid ole fool

Wait i thought lucius was the one that was pregnant

Wow! This is my second time reading this story and I still can get thrills and chills from the best parts. I was reading another vampire story and it reminded me of this one. Some of my favourite parts were with Luc and Sev. You portrayed these characters really well. Sylvia is a perfect name for their child. Liam was an amazing OCish character. I'm not sure if he's a true OC because he has Harry's memories, but still. I wish we could've heard more about Tracy and Draco, I like to think that Draco joined Marvolo's guard and Tracy had her own family with Blaise. You wrote this story well. Good job, I hope you can continue writing for fun!
I can't believe this story is over, it feels like I just started it,
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I loved this story so much! Well done!