The story is a little hard to follow do to the bad english. It seems that english isn't your first language. But this last posting was slightly better. The thing with fan fics is that you as the author can do whatever you want with the characters. I'm not sure where your going with the plot, but you as the author should have an idea. Keep it up okay.

Cool chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next.

Cool chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next.

Cool chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next.

Cool chapter, I'm happy Yami is home and I can't wait to see what happens next.

Cool chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.

Cool story so far, can't wait to see what happens next.

Seriously? If you are going to try and post a story, you need to either get a beta who is patient and understanding to your horrible grammar and spelling or just stop writing and posting until you have had a few more years of English. Even the authors who are posting out of the country have better English skills. STOP POSTING...your giving us a bad name...

I'm not going to lie to you; this is horrendous. Ignoring the fact that, for some reason, Yami and Atem are somehow siblings despite being the same person and that they have the idiotic and staggeringly unoriginal last name "Sennen", this story is still horribly written. No clear understanding of grammar, no use of quotation marks, odd formatting, questionable spelling of names, and absolutely no creativity or variation in your descriptions. Everything is he said, she said. I'm going to guess that either A) you're a troll or B) you're 12 years old. I'm leaning more toward the latter, because this isn't even funny like troll material. It's just bad.