This is gorgeous. Definitely going on my favourites. Thanks so much for the great read.

it's an okay story. but is that really the end? you should make it longer.

That was a good ficlet. As with Tumultuous, your style of writing here is fantastically vivid. I hope you write more in the future. I like your style so much I'm even thinking about reading your Auron/Rikku het, though just the idea of that pairing makes me ill. But you're definitely persuasive so who knows. _~

Ok third try. Good story, one of my favorites. Succinct, and successfull at keeping everyone in character. I like that it is Tidus who actually consoles Auron and does so without causing embarassment. GReat study in regret and anger and concern for these two. Rating is possibly too high. While the sword in the end is metaphorically strong I just didn't find much substantiation for a more sensual relationship within the text aside from the comment about possibilities. I can't comment on grammer because mine is horrid. Good work here thanks.(if this review comes three times I apologize, my computer has refused to send it and lost it I think twice)

This is one of my favorite stories. You have successfully dealt with both anger and regret on the part of these two characters not only quite succinctly but also without tossing them too far out of character. It is also a story that sort of flip flops Auron's role as Tidus' guardian, in the end it is actually Tidus who calms an obviously stressed Auron, yet the boy does so without, I don't know, pulling rank. That in mind, I think you also open a window into the more intuitive side of Tidus. You handled this wonderfully. I do think that possibly you were overly concerned with the rating though (better safe than sorry) but even with the few allusions you make toward a more sensual bond (wow I may be stepping on toes here) you don't really cross that line. Metaphorically the sword in the end could be something but I think that such a relationship is not quite substantiated within the rest of the text aside from the comment about possibilities. Good work. I can't comment on grammer as mine is poor.

So very well written, and I love the story!

Ya kidding? That wasn't yaoi at all. (sniggers) Well, I kinda could see it in that last line.

"Auron's sword lay between them all night."

heh heh. Ahem, but anyway...

Wow. This is cool. I could really see this happening with those characters. You caught them well.

Gotta go now, and see if you have anything else posted here. :)

Hey, i like! Even though nothing big happened, it was well written and pretty interesting. Tho, ya know, it'd be nice to read a yaoi fic that's LONGER...*hinthint*

cool. Intresting

Ok. Critical eye first. I'm not seeing any spelling errors or glaring punctuation problems. Two thumbs up! Most Auron fics posted recently are so riddled with glaring problems that I have almost sworn to stop reviewing at all. Hooray!

A small note about paragraph six, however. You have a bit of Tidus dialogue that trails off. It seems to end into a Tidus /thought/. However, due to punctuation, capitalization, and lack of any emphasis or separator, I'm confused there. I'm unsure as to the intent of the author. I mention this because, other than this little bauble and a sentence fragment, this seems to be an immaculate doc.

Now, onto other things.

Nice job! Tidus seems IC, but not terribly so. He's pretty...I dunno...thoughtless?...nonchalant?...perky?

I'm not getting much of that here, but I don't need to really. So, no true problem. Auron is portrayed as stoic, focused, and stern. Very IC characteristics.

I like that you ended the story on a clear note of separation. Those two have issues. _~ I'm not a big Tidus/Auron fan as a slash pairing - but that's got to do with age and consent and not m/m. Since you have "Bonds" linked, I'm sure you know that though. *Grin*

Nice work. Welcome to the neighborhood. Glad to have some quality.

Amberlee

PS: Yaoi (which stands for Yama nashi, imi nashi, ochi and translates to “no climax, no meaning, no resolution”) DOES mean that physical intimacy or a romantic relationship is, at minimum, implied if not literally spelled out. If it’s just “boys love” it’s shounen-ai. As a result, I would not classify this tale as yaoi. I would, however, give it a possible shounen-ai label. *two snaps*