Reviews for Critical Hit
LadyoftheChicken chapter 41 . 6/22
This story can have all my uwus
LadyoftheChicken chapter 16 . 6/21
AHAHHA aha man do I love this joke. Dude your fanfic is amazing and I can’t wait to finish it, I’m really excited to see what happens next!
miistical chapter 1 . 9/9/2019
Hey! I just want to let you know that I remember reading this when it was updating and that I think about this fic often? When I read this I was just starting high school and now I'm a college sophomore lmao I'm not in this fandom at all anymore but it's fics like yours that lead me to find my long term best friends and roommate. Life can be so wild sometimes and your work honestly makes me nostalgic, so, like, thanks for all the good times, author!
Olivia Kirkland chapter 41 . 5/13/2019
I love this so much just finished it for a fourth time and I still adore it
PotatoPasta chapter 6 . 5/5/2019
And that’s how the sub-bromance plot of Alfie and Tony began! xD However we’re all here for Ameripan!

The first boss of the game is beaten! 15 more to go!
PotatoPasta chapter 5 . 4/26/2019
If this were real, I’d say that I love Alfie and all but he’s stupid to tell a random stranger everything about him, but I’m glad in this story he shows a definite and immediate trust towards Kiki ;)

Like you said “Nothing better than to see two nerds Fallon in love” xD xD xD xD especially when these nerds are smokin hot! ;)
PotatoPasta chapter 4 . 4/25/2019
“Neither. I like cowboys!” At that moment, I realized what Kiki has on Alfie was a love on first sight despite the fact that she thinks hooking up with a person who she had just met online is creepy xD
PotatoPasta chapter 3 . 4/14/2019
Yeah~ I bet Kiki is hot as hell ;)

I guess that "critical hit" is a foreshadow of that Kiki is falling in love w Alfie isn't it?
PotatoPasta chapter 2 . 4/12/2019
I’d LITERALLY play this game if it had existed ;( God, why isn’t there a game like this in— there must be right? Were you motivated by one of those? If so, care to tell? _

And at this moment —ladies and gentlemen— where the most UNREALISTIC BUT CHARMING love was born ;)
PotatoPasta chapter 1 . 4/8/2019
I Press Start for this story ;)

Literally this and “Tomatita Angel” is my favorite _ So here I go again! X) not sure how frequently I’d be able to read this though ;(

Charlie seems bitchy in this chapter, but tbh I kinda figured out her plan when Alfie and Kiki met ;)
CoveTPeng chapter 41 . 12/22/2018
Wow, I have no words for this... This is brilliant :) I can’t express how happy I am to have found your works. I’d love a sequel to this.
Dulharpa chapter 41 . 9/16/2018
holy shiiiiiiit! this was amazing! the twists were great and the way you wrapped it up was amazing! and i loved how you added in all of those canon characters in too! and honestly i loved the bits with arthur and charlie and kiki's dad was great! it is a great read!
Guest chapter 41 . 8/18/2017
Beautiful! :')
Guest chapter 25 . 8/17/2017
this is so amazing! I can't tell ya how long I've been looking for a story like this, I'm probably going to read through it to fast cuz I can't wait to see what happens!
Camoostrich chapter 30 . 7/12/2017
I love your story. It's very well written and layered. I especially like Birdie and Maple because it sounds like they named eachother and that's cute. There was a good build up in the character development and I liked all threferences like the Mario kart one with the blue turtles and the MLT. The characters were usually easy to figure out though I still wonder who Spick was and who red and wolfie were. Spick sounds like Italy but Italy appears as smiley though. Love your story you prolly won't see this and goodbye.
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