i love the story. is this the last chapter or will there be more

I Like, I Lust, I Love!Please Update Soon!

Great chapters Plz update

Great chapter Plz update

Great chapter and plz update

Poor Burnsk at least Cassus was there for him in his last monment

Great chapters and plz update soon

I would suggest proofreading a couple times. some punctuation here and there would strengthen the dialogue considerably. Keep up the good work!

real nice, man. I like a good OC fic.

best regards, RJ Kimasako

The story has likable characters and good story development. Could use a bit of work in the punctuation, spelling and capitalization department. Fanfiction has built-in tools to help you correct his before you post. On the top of the screen, on the right hand side, there is a little square box that looks like an ABC with a check mark. Click on this and it provides a most helpful grammar and spell checker. It even picks up tricky things like passive sentences and the other stuff our English teachers were forever trying to get us to improve upon. :)

Anyway, outside of those things, Tara, Cassus and Banks are likable characters and their dialogue flows well. The tension between Cassus and Bansk works well in this scene. The healing scene between Cassus and Tara was also nicely done. In the Star Wars universe, a hospital is known as a medcenter. There is a helpful dictionary that translates things from our "universe" and what they are all called in the "Star Wars universe." I wish I could provide you a link but unfortunately FFN just strips away all links. But, you can Google it. Plus, the Wookipedia is always brilliant for looking up such things. I generally consult the Wookie about a dozen times, (or more), to double-check that I have my facts and details straight on any given chapter. It is the details that make a story feel more "real." Glad you updated. I like this story.

Whoa. Love these characters. Such an interesting relationship between these two. Can't wait to see where you go with this!

Awsome! Now please update!