Well, just some things I learned in this chapter. Harry and Hermione are 4th years, but this story is supposed to be set after Sirius died in the DoM, which means this should be the summer before 6th year. The story has not gotten any less cheesy (in my opinion). And while the story is not awful and it sounds like it could have been an interesting storyline, but the execution of it is not holding my attention and I’m going to move along to another story.

Well, so far portions of this story seems pretty cheesy, but I’m going to keep reading to see if it gets less so.

Love a good bonding scene.

Hermione...! you're shameless. And it's great.

Overall the story would have been a better read with more details. This read like a long outline with a rushed ending. I was disappointed that Draco/Ginny did all of that training with the founders but in the end didn't get to do much in the final battle. There was also no mention of Draco/Ginny for the ending of the story. Harry becomes headmaster, but where do Draco and Ginny fit into the future?

After reading the entire story, I came back to this chapter. I was puzzled that there was no explanation about the Death Eater wards around Hogwarts and them not affecting Snape. Wouldn't he have been affected by the wards?

Thank you for sharing this very entertaining story.

1500 hundred years? that's 1.5 million years. and Draco and Ginny as the heirs of Slytherin and Hufflepuff? that's probably even less likely than Ron and Pansy. I've given up reading this fic.

/groan did you seriously name Hermione's parents Herman and Ione? and I thought Monica and Wendell were terrible.

hi im a first time reader of your stories im not going to do a stupid rant coz theyre a waste of every 1s time but i do have to ask why did you waste a chapter with just a repeat of the intro above it? just seems strange to me is all

This was a fantastic read well done

So by having Hermione attack the aurors, they now have an excuse to arrest her. Instead of turning their wands to dust and going after the aurors, it would have made much more sense to lie about where they were and let Draco cover for them. Just because you made them all powerful, doesn't mean you have to make them use that power every chance you get. They're trying to keep it quiet, remember?

Nope, can't do it. I thought I could finish this story, but I can't. You had stated that they want to keep their abilities quiet and yet you have them doing high handed things like what happened in the Great Hall. Why even bother making people take a Wizard's Oath? You are doing too much that doesn't make sense. You realize that for two people who speak against bullying, you are turning them into exactly that? "With great power comes great responsibility." It doesn't look like Harry and Hermione were ever taught this.

You need to make it more clear when someone finishes someone else's sentences. At the beginning of the chapter, you have Dumbledore talking to Harry and Hermione. In the dialogue you use '...' I thought to myself 'huh, that's a weird place for a pause'. It would have been better to end Dumbledore's part with '...' and begin Hermione's on the next line with '...' It just helps to avoid confusion, we don't have to guess that a new person is talking, or re-read a paragraph to double check where they took over.

The bit with the Minister is a little confusing as well. I get that Harry acted surprised in order to hide the fact he created the wind, but why stand up? He could have just looked around the office while still sitting in the chair. Standing up and sitting down again for no apparent reason is a bit conspicuous. And what's with the screams coming from the fireplace? How did they know there were people listening in? Why did they scream? Don't put things in just to put things in, there needs to be a reason. The invisible body guards make sense, the people screaming from the fireplace don't.

If I were Hermione I'd be pissed with that type of wedding. What about her parents? I can see Harry doing a big proposal, but 'officially marrying' Hermione?

Still a fairly good story. You use their names a bit too much in the dialogue (at one point you started three sentences in a row with one of their names), but it's still worth a read.

I can understand killing them, but was decapitaion really necessary? Way over the top. There were also a few incorrect words used. "...what I had to do to defend Hermione and my friends safe." This should either read 'to defend Hermione and my friends.' or 'to keep Hermione and my friends safe.' The only other complaint I have about this chapter, is that despite his words, Harry is acting a bit like a bully towards Draco. Was it necessary to cut off his air? No. Was it necessary to keep him pinned to the ceiling? No. Yes, keep him there after rushing Harry so Harry can talk to him, but not for the remainder of the trip.

Goodrich and Rowena are the ancestors, Harry and Hermione are the descendants. You seem to correct it later on, but you have Godric say that they are not there to harm their ancestors.

How did the adults not realize they moved somewhere? Even if Harry and Hermione brought the table and chairs with them, the vault contents would have disappeared.