purple nove shelt... as someone who has been sexually abused multiple times let me say that it is very possible to have a erotic dream after such a thing. the first ti.e i was molested i felt disgusted. However after that there waz a time whan i was afraid of my own body and felt tainted. therefore i preceded to daydream about a attractive nice boy at my school as i touched myself. for the first time after that i realized that i was not abnormal. a few monthes later i was able to fight him when he came to me. after a couple of times he stopped coming. a couple of years ago after entering my first true relationship i was able to disclose what had happened to me. so it you cant understand that everyone reacts differently to trama and non of the reactions are wrong then you should stop the vitriol wards and harsh conjecture.

It's okay so far but I just find your writing to be pretty amateur.

Just after his rape he got an erotic dream? Seriously? I stop reading. This story is just too stupid and immature, and very insulting for the people who have been victim of such abuse which can come here. Seriously dude, when you chose such a subject, take references! And if you can't well speak about it, don't do it! It's vehicle faults things about the victims and stereoptyps, and make the understanding of the victims going bad! Everyday I read such and things here, and I'm upset because it's disinformation!

thanks I needed a good laugh hahaha

Sirius... she's mean cuz shes on her period

Lol

me as a parent

I'm sorry I hate being this person but shouldn't it be probably?

Great story!

Totally was slow more and more tearing up as I read till nev yelled. Thank god. I was like what I don't remember the description saying major character death. So relieved!

Hey, I just love your story.

If you are up for some constructive critisism please keep reading. (otherwise ignore the rest of it)
You use the word prolly instead of probably. I know this is urban language for the same thing HOWEVER. I suggest you only use it when it fits the character. Your writing is really good. So I think you could try and make the sentences and thoughts of different characters in sync with who they are. For instance. Harry would probably use prolly. But Draco might not because he was raised tos peak like some pureblood. Snape would probably use a lot of long difficult words. As would Hermione only Snape's tone is different (more snarky and cynical, at least in my head). Playing with this kind of stuff would possibly make your characters more alive. Note: The ideas I gave you about how the characters would talk are just that ideas. So don't feel like you have to implement them.

I was falling apart laughing! absolutely priceless

Good story so far, but I was was having trouble keeping up with who was talking about what. You kept jumping from one conversation to another without a break in between. It is a good story though. You just need to separate the conversations.

So I only just started reading this fic. Yes I know...slower than snail. My bad. Anyways...I almost had a criticism when Sev was making the sleeping potion I thought 'Aconite? In a sleeping potion? And Belladonna? Ya know they're both poisonous, right?' then I kept reading 'Oh a bezoar. Fair enough. That'll work. Continue.' So no bad remarks from me. It's really good so far. Well written and thought out. Great stuff :D

Frost isn't a red head in the books or movie