Witty or not, it works. I'm loving your story. It's even got good grammar. Happy sigh.

Oh gosh I like this a lot. I mean it's seriously dark but oddly that is what makes it so interesting. The story is well written too.

Amazing! Good chapter. But when Pitch catched Guardians? Or all is only nightmare? I a little hope that Jack join Pitch (What I can say? I love when the main character is evil.) *innocent smile* What more I can say? I will waiting for next chapter.

I need Moar! What happens next?!

Sooooooooo good love it was gonna review the other chapters but I was so into the story I kept continuing into the next chapter before reviewing love it can't wait for the next chapters

What if I want the boogeyman to get me?

My parents, therapist, and brother say I'm attracted to the badguys so.

Anyways. I love this story!

please write more!

You captured the core of depression. Bravo.
This is unfathomable.

Poor Jack...Where are the Guardians during all this? Are they looking for him? \

Ok. I understand. But please, update soon. Your story is amazing even if sometimes scary. :)

OMG! So good!

please update soon

My sadistic little heart LOVES this. Thankyou.

This is really good, update!

Woah, this is so evil...also in the authors note I totally understand what you mean by that. I had ten to eleven characters in my first book and I was trying to cycle through them so they'd all be main characters but I was really stuck on at least four and I'd bring the others in when I need action. It still frustrates me when I have more than two characters, four is a little difficult but more than that and I find myself getting all worked up.