is link a moron? hes herd nothing but bad things about the wizza4d yet he still accepts a drink ehat a idiot took me right out of the story

exelent! 6 out of 5 stars! i think it could be published with the right permission

I love this piece! I know it's been up for a while and I'm slow, but I just wanted to compliment the use of language to support the setting of the novel. It was truly well done, from the characterization, to the plot, to the descriptions. I was not disappointed with it in the slightest. A few typos here and there, but nothing drastic enough to take away from the mood. Good job!

I love the big sister sort of vibe coming from Gwyn!

I read ‘hydra’ and I freaked because I just knew someone was bound to cut the head off!

I’m just imagining that scene from Aladdin where Aladdin goes into the middle of that gold room and finds the gravy boat looking thing.

Gregor scares me, at any moment he could get angered and kill Link. Vic versa with Mihari and Zelda! I love this story!

I love this fanfiction! It is so well written, and the plot is amazing! Though I do realize that it is based off of the game Legends of Zelda, this is an amazing take on the story.

Just now reading this but it’s amazing so far. Your author notes are honestly unique and add...something to the story...something...good. I’m in the beginning of the story right now but I’m already hooked.

This is one of the best fan-fictions I have ever had the pleasure of reading, you wrote this like a superior writer and I enjoyed it very much. It was...no IS refreshing and definitely made me realize some things as a writer.

P.s Thank you for not throwing a sex scene at me as a reader with the first ten or so chapters! That was probably the most refreshing part of your fanfic! Please continue to work as a writer! You have a lot of natural talent!

Interesting so far, I quite like the setup. The informal storytelling style that you use in some parts is unusual but I kind of like it. It makes it seem more like a tale being told to the reader rather than written word.

This is several years old now so it may not matter, but noticed a small error come up a few times in the last few chapters where it says "presents" as in multiple gifts rather than "presence" as to be present/to exist. They're similar and sound exactly the same, so it's an easy one to miss and writing programs may not pick it up. You've got an interesting plot and background going though which is most of the work :)

I wish there was an app that would read fanfic outloud to me so I can adult and child at the same time.

That aside, I feel I'd be more satisfied If ghira got some comeuppance, or if Hyrule Castle had a high employee turn over, because... That's a hostile work environment. It really is.

I'm still reading it though. That's not changing.

He must not be allowed to know what is in that safe.

"I brought tea."

Instant. Audible. No.

Okay, okay... the murder plot makes more sense now. At this point my only real question is why the flapjack do people keep drinking Ghirahim's tea?

I though Link was going to get hit with some mind control potion when he drank it. (So that, technically, he did kill the king, in an "accessory to murder" kind of way, not a "murder" murder way. ) I thought it was gunna be poisoned when the king got it (because blood is dirty and Ghirahim is a ponce). I was positive-POSITIVE-it was going to be one or the other when Zelda took it (to ensure she signed the execution order.)

I hope all this pent up paranoia sees a payoff at some point.