Whoa that was so funny oh man starfire was so curious and it was probably a dong

"Please Raven, what is it that Beast Boy wishes friend Cyborg to suck on, and why does he wish him to suck on it after winning a game?" Starfire asked innocently

"Uh…don't worry about it Starfire, it's not important."

"But I wish to know. Please tell me friend!"

HAHAHAHAHA!

Dude! Excellent first go! :)

I love the interaction you've got going on with Beast Boy and Raven - it's very light and allows everyone to read into it as they want. I could definitely see this happening within the series.

Now, for the constructive part - don't get discouraged because I got a very similar review when I was first posting on here and it helped me out IMMENSELY in all my writing. And this is more of a technical thing rather than a content thing. But I've noticed that readers tend to point out misspellings/technical details as almost more distracting than issues with content.

So, when you're writing quotes - the descriptor that follows something that's been said is denoted with a comma. Provided it's describing something about the way the words were said. For example:

"Guys I'm back. Let's get the food out and eat, I'm starving." Robin announced as the doors revealed his presence.

Should be: "Guys I'm back. Let's get the food out and eat, I'm starving," Robin announced as the doors revealed his presence.

You do it sometimes and not others. So just make sure you're watching out for it. :)

Also, just be careful about switching point of view in the middle of the story. It started out with Robin's p.o.v., then sort of an omniscient bit with the Titans in the main room, then to Raven's at the end.

All in all, really well done! I can't wait to see what else you're working on! :)

Lovely! The ending was just right. Keep on writing and just let the ideas flow! And if you ever need any help don't hesitate to contact me. Can't wait to see what you have in store!

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Flames are bad reviews. Y'know, insults.

Reason why most people don't want them :)