Reviews for The Ninth Sekirei Pillar
Maks10 chapter 2 . 7/24
The chakra system is something spiritual it will not suffer from an attack on visual damage
Guest chapter 12 . 7/23
Why is naruto such a weak little bitch in your story? Like naruto can move faster than light in the anime/manga and he is a war vet but you make him lose to everyone when he should be able to one shot them with zero dif. It makes no sense you underpowered the fuck out of him and also made someone who littlery just got out of a war have zero awareness. Why would he just let people do what they want when he knows they are trying to hurt people he cares about.
ninjafanhein chapter 2 . 7/3
yes how do you get jealous not even going the speed of sound when the fodders of the verse are faster than that Like kid Sasuke who outran sound effortlessly and kid kakashi who chopped lighting in have
The Tetract chapter 19 . 6/15
This might be a little flamey, but oh well.

Yeah, this hyper focus state explanation for the clones is a huge asspull, as well as just beingand i’m sorry for the blunt languagefucking stupid. He hyper focuses and then becomes someone else? Unless his hyperfocus state is just dissociative identity disorder, that’s an entirely ridiculous explanation. I don’t really mind the clones too much themselves, but the way you handled them is.. bad.

This is actually my second time reading thisI see why I liked it the first time around, but man. The plot holesasspulls sure are something.
The Tetract chapter 17 . 6/14
Just realized the clone is a self insert. Yikes.
Takadoshi Uzumaki chapter 45 . 6/14
but you already gave a dead giveaway with Hidan... .
Takadoshi Uzumaki chapter 39 . 6/13
Meh, democracy worked best when Calvin Coolidge was the president. (He believed in a lack of major government interference.)
The Tetract chapter 16 . 6/13
Old story. Still gonna point this out, though.

This plot with the clones “becoming their own people” makes no sense from the get go.

Unless the clones somehow come into existence with none of the emotions/memories of naruto, then it is a fact that all of his clones should have an extreme level of affection for hanabi, and a great level of affection for yume and possibly akitsu. So, for them to start fucking each other and enter a relationship (which is already pretty odda few weeks out of his body and suddenly naruto clones are willing to fuck themselves?) they’d have to be willing to ignore their feelings for hanabi, as well as the ones for yume and hanabi.

Which is entirely, completely, ridiculously out of character for the naruto you’ve built up.

Cool story otherwise.
Guest chapter 3 . 6/8
Yashima was quivered in sheer terror, backing away slowly, trying to make herself seem as small as possible in an attempt to escape the notice of the 'power' before her. She didn't even consider going to the aid of her Ashikabi. The overpowering presence before her overwhelmed the bond between her and Junichi.

Lol no. Sekirei are beings solely and completely dedicated to love for the ashikabi. Nothing short of death would stop them.

Unless they're karasuba.
MonkeyDGabry chapter 43 . 5/26
Naruto's chakra is orange in the manga if i am remembering right. It's just in the anime that is blue.
MonkeyDGabry chapter 28 . 5/25
Damn, i read this story a long time ago, and reading it again after so many years made me realize that there are a lot of plot holes, i can almost find one every chapter ahah. Oh well the story is still fun. Oh an since the manga was still on going i find it funny that you thought your Naruto is more op than in the show. You underestimated Kishimoto and his stupid ability to break power scales ahah. The Naruto at the end of the manga could one shot every one in his base form most likely. It's ridiculous.
i.amdizzy2 chapter 51 . 5/22
Ight , I highly slept on this story when I was younger . You’re one of the more skilled writers that I’ve come across.
SLay KinG chapter 2 . 5/6
classic clishé Sasuke will be back if nt him then his abilities shouldn't Naruto feel emotions
SLay KinG chapter 2 . 5/2
classic clishé Sasuke will be back if nt him then his abilities shouldn't Naruto feel emotions
Jamal rarick chapter 2 . 4/20
Nope. Can’t do it anymore. Way too trusting, left Sauske in the alley without destroying the body, giving away information, and the worst so far giving away blood to strangers in a foreign place he doesn’t understand. Stupid bro stupid.
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