The thing about this story is that it was know of the first fanfics I ever read and now it's 2017 and I still come back and read this fic when I'm sad bc it's so entertaining. So, thanks!

THIS WAS AFWUL! I MAY NEED TO PUKE!

Ahh... so that's why this chapter is all over the place...

I love this story. It's so bad it's hilarious.

(Note about Japanese: a few bits of it can make a story more interesting, but any sense within the story within a reader mindset gets thrown out of the window when it takes up entire sentences. Furthermore, makes the surrounding text more difficult to understand, and just looks absurd.

Oh, & cut down the anime references please, for they look very absurd - people have different tastes!)

What? I am confused on the chap Jenni Joel Jaffa cakes and jibberish

So cool hi I would love to be put in if I could
Violet Grace

Nice, a huge temper, loves books but also loves quiditich, loyal, and brave
Tall, long black hair, green eyes, teal and purple streaks, pretty kinda.

I like this story a lot. I love how there is so much detail. I know the rest of the story is already written but I want to say that I would not have voted because I love Hufflepuff! Okay i would have voted but for Hufflepuff. But for the sake of the story Gryffindor would be the best house. But the other houses would use more imagination to write because JKR doesn't go into much detail with them. Thanks for writting this story. It seems so awesome!

hahaa poor draco! when willl you be continuing your storyyyyyyyyyyyyy? I NEED TO KNOW! ! okay and yeah i love the story :) okay byeee

Kids is from Bye Bye Birdie isn't it?

since this draco is a girl your making him sound like a lesbian!LOL

Dude! u have like my whole frickin school in here!

Yup...Being a girl sucks especially when it's dat time of the month...

Let me just say that megan is freakin awesome! and i love how i share her name,some personality traits,and slight insanity!

good story :)

what the!anyway, ur very imaginative

Ma'am, I don't know what translator you're using, but it's wrong.

That is NOT how you say "Chocolate Frog" in Japanese. For one thing, the Japanese HAVE no word for chocolate; they take it from the ENGLISH word, which is taken from the French word, I believe. the correct pronunciation, as you would write it in katakana (for non-Japanese words)would be "chokoretto," which could be shortened to "choko" for short.

For ANOTHER thing-the Japanese word for "frog" is "kaeru." Observe;

Kaeru no uta ga

kikoette kuru yo

gua, gua, gua, gua

ge ge ge ge ge ge ge ge gua, gua, gua

"Gua" and "ge" are the otomatopaeia(sp?) sound for a sound a frog makes. Hence, frog "kaeru".

You also forgot the conjoining particle "no" in the phrase. i.e. "watashi no enpitsu" (my pencil), "Draco no tomodachi" (Draco's friends).

The closest approximation for "Chocolate Frog" in Japanese would therefore be "Chokoretto no Kaeru" (or "Kaeru no Chokoretto", it's been awhile since I've taken Japanese). However, considering that the TITLE itself is indicative of an English treat, and NOT a Japanese one, it could also be simply called "Chokoretto Furoggu" rather than complicating it.

This is aside from the fact that there are other problems I have with the story. i.e. Use of Japanese combined with English (which sounds immature and uneducated, and this is coming from someone who USED to use it before she figured this out), some of the characterizations, the name that you've chosen for Draco ("Ryo" is NOT how you say "dragon." It's "Ryuu," and no matter what you say it's a BOY'S name and it's NOT commonly found in everyday language), ect. If you'd like some more feedback let me know and I'd be more than glad to help you out.

Good luck.