*crying* OMG...that is amazing, but heart wrenching because I love the Ryou because how precious and cute he is...this fanfic...words dont describe my feels... I love it though! Defentily how it was in second person, I have trouble with second person when trying to write anything. Keep up the amazing storys! :)

Chao- Even though this story is about Ryou, yay for adding Yugi torture!

YChao- I really liked the suspense between what Bakura was doing to Yugi in the beginning for the story, and the torment Ryou was going through.

Chao- Excellent story, both in plot and in writing. Not only did you write in second person, something not seen too often, but you wrote this out in present tense. You really placed a lot of thought into how your story was to progress through plot and writing. It made Chao feel something for Ryou!

YChao- I really liked how you had Bakura call Ryou a "landlord" rather than the typical "host", "partner", or "light". It made reading Bakura's lines more interesting and evil! Muahaha!

Chao- Hooray for originality! In the part where Ryou asks Bakura about who Bakura was aiming to hurt, him or Yami, it really seemed like the story could end there and would have been fine. Even though you continued, it wasn't annoying or unnecessary, and you made it work with concluding about Yugi's aftermath. And your choice about Ryou crying with Bakura laughing may have been sad, but it worked well for a conclusion. You just may want to go back and look through your work and see what little adjustments need to be made, like wording or having something capitalized that doesn't need to be. Great job overall! Good luck with any future projects you have!

I really liked how you put it into the second person. Off the bat, I knew it was Ryou.

Lisa: No you didn't!

Okay fine... but after a couple of sentences, I pieced it all together. :p

Anyways, I really liked it. I don't think I've read a fic that's second person. So this was a first and I really, really liked how you did it! Something different! :D

I'm not much of a Ryou fan either, but reading his story was interesting. I can honestly see this story being apart of the actual story (maybe minus all of the much loved Yugi abuse (only some of it)). I think it really showed a good chuck of what Ryou was feeling. It was really accurate. I like it! :)

I like the risk! Keep up the amazing work!

Kairi

It was depressing, but it was nice to get a glimpse into Ryou's mind. I find his story interesting since he has such little screen time. I know the story is mainly about Yugi and the Pharaoh, but I wish they'd gone more into Ryou's story. Nice work :).

This was nice, but in my opinion, the second person was really distracting. I couldn't get into the story because I'm not Ryou, and this I wouldn't do these things. The whole time, I was thinking "What?" because it makes no sense if I were to fill the slot. This was good, but I personally think it would have been far better in a different point of view.

Good luck on your writing!

I loved this! Especially the pov! :)

Well damn that was a depressing read. amazingly written, but depressing.

That was creepy, and depressing, but... it was still really awesome! I really did enjoy how it let us into Ryou's head, although it took a bit of figuring out who was narrating. Took a bit of time to realize 'you' was Ryou.

:D It's November! That means there's less than a month before Deal With The Devil!

-SerenePanic

AND for being such an awesome writer, cookies! (::)(::)(::)(::)

YAY. How delicious I approve of this fic.