Write more please

I'm excited to see what Jeremy does, and I hope Ralph and Felix are alright.

Interesting premise.

i love it. Update soon cause so far its a fun story to read.

Nice. :) I wanna know what he's gonna do to them.

I really want to see where you are going with this, I hope the kid doesn't mess up the games. Please continue!

hmmm... i like it! wanted a new chappie instead, but this is good with the edits.

this is 2 negitive
WTF do you use cokeglasses how unmodern
i think Jemrey is a big nerd and the comcept for a human in the games has already been taken.
most of your work has unesseary om you.

I really like how you cleaned up the last scene- though I did love some of the lines in there, it was pretty confusing the first time around. And of course the rest of this chapter is great as well. Will be eagerly waiting for chapter 3!

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this is really really good.

Oh, dear! Despite the young man's best intentions I have a feeling this is going to turn out very bad.

Interesting character you have here. He's interesting and we can definately see where he's coming from. I like his backstory and this is exactly the type of guy who can cause trouble for our favorite gamers.

My favorite part, though, was how Mr. Litwack talks about the characters like they're alive and used to make up stories about them. That's just great.

Liked the bit about the stranded characters huddled around a 'fire flower'.

Interesting... keep going!

Oh, and finally an oc that doesn't drive me off the deep end. Nice job xD

Interesting story! More chapters soon?