Wowzers

Wait, what? You didn't finish this? Oh well it was still good, and anyways I already know how it ends. It's sad, but it's not that terrible since they all come out fine and Felix even gets a place as an extra character in Hero's Duty :D

By the way, I almost never enjoy romance scenes, that genre is just not my thing, but I did enjoy the date in this one fanfic :D It's just so well done and they're so much in character!

Love ya! Keep it up!

That's it :(

This story was off to a fantastic start! I immensely enjoyed what was there. I hope you decide to finish it some day. I hadn't realized that it's been so long since it updated, or I may not have clicked it, but it was still a very good story for the short while that it lasted :P

Thanks for writing at least this much :)

OH NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
XDXDXD
luv it!

oh no. oh oh/

"Get it, got it, good."

Is this perchance, a reference to that wonderful old film The Court Jester?

Okay, on with the review.

The writing style is quite good, and you've got the energetic aspects of Vanellope down pat. I was honestly laughing aloud with sheer delight when she first appeared because when she's in a ridiculously good mood, that's exactly how she behaves. Truthfully, you've pretty nearly summed up within your narration my own response as a film viewer to her as a character. I found her loud, silly, irritating, obnoxious, adorable, and sympathetic all at once. Everyone else is in character so far as well.

I've just one significant issue, however- you've violated official canon by having Fix-It-Felix Jr. get knocked out of commission before Felix and Calhoun's wedding. It was clear from the movie's end that the wedding coincided with the spike in Fix-It-Felix Jr.'s popularity as a result of the addition of the Q-Bert characters. Having Felix and Calhoun not be married here is impossible to reconcile with the ending of the film as we got it. There are two ways that I can think of for you to fix this:

1. Re-structure the plot and re-write the story so that they are already married by this point.

2. Re-write the ending of chapter two and re-structure the plot so that the spike in popularity is still ongoing, the wedding occurs in story, and the unplugging of Fix-It-Felix Jr. occurs later in the plot.

So yes, the story does need some revision from what I can see, but I wouldn't throw it out wholesale. The writing style is very good, the characters are all well drawn, and the premise is excellent. If you still intend to pick up where you've left off and keep going on this story, then rest assured I'll read your efforts.

Again, you keep up the quality. I really want to see this keep going. You do a great Calhoun, making her balanced a mix between her hardass character and a softer side. That's something the other writers I've read weren't able to do. And your Felix is really great here too.

Nitpicks:

"and she was clad in armor from head to foot. " Should probably be "neck to foot". "Head to foot" generally means that it includes headgear.

"Amongst the soft candlelit atmosphere of their corner of the restaurant," I humbly suggest the simpler "In the soft candlelit atmosphere in their corner of the restaurant,"

"suddenly felt a rush of lightheaded anxiety fall upon her as the other restaurant patrons shot anticipated stares in their direction." It should be "anticipating". Anticipating is when someone is still doing it. That is"I am still anticipating" while afterwards it is "I anticipated this scene"

"Felix!" she barked, and her voice automatically snapped into its sharp, no-nonsense, soldier-ordering tone." Lose the "and". The "and" makes it a sequence of events, and that makes it sound like it is only after her harsh "Felix" that her tone goes into command mode. That's not the case, so it should just be "she barkd, her voice snapping into it's sharp, no-nonsense soldier-ordering tone."

"and taken the little carts back into his respective game, he still felt like an idiot." Only use respective when there is more than one person involved. So "they took the carts back to their respective games" but "Felix went back to his game".

Hope this all makes sense and inspires you to keep going. Happy writing.

This is great. This is probably the first fic in this fandom that had a Vanellope that seemed so much like herself. Well done. The rest are good too, but your Vanellope is without a doubt the one you do best.

I see you haven't updated since last year. I hope to see more of this story because it sure has promise, both in plot and writing level.

One nitpick in the first chapter:

"and it's like eve3rybody else doesn't exist anymore. I'm sure they're not doing it to be mean. They're just…" He tried to formulate a good word. "Infatuated." I think you meant "everybody", without a "3" in there.

On to the next chapter!

Please update soon! This is a really great story and I'm ecstatic with reading more and finding out what happens next!

Gosh, I just happened to notice this one! I'd been curious about the specifics of the unplug after reading Ghost Boy, and your writing is a treat as always.

Please update soon! And also I'm curious as to how Ralph and the others found Turbo as well!

FINALLY! A fanfic about something much more than just romance. I kinda hate those fanfics which keep on endlessly drone on about love and all that, but this is more like the opposite. Perfect, and definitely hoping for more.

Please, please update! :D Love it so far!

Are you still doing this?

Alright . . . so I definitely know what's its like to have a fic fall by the wayside, and you just can't seem to work up the gumption to continue it . . . . but please, please, PLEASE consider taking another crack at this. Because I think it has the potential to be incredible. I love the way you write Ralph and his interactions with everyone . . . I'm writing my own RalphxOC fic, and I would ADORE seeing your take on an OC pairing ( if I am correct in thinking that's where this was headed ;). Just know that if you ever do decide to continue this, I'll be right in line to read it along with many others!