Reviews for The Ancient Queen
Debbie Hicks chapter 8 . 1/23/2015
9.
Chapter 9.
it happened my daughter with the Coven were Hunting with two turned with the Denali coven I their Ancient queen Broken a Law by biting as all of the Newborns very fat too much with them sunk our fangs and Shared as all of their Greenish blood as very far too much and much too Extremely too heaviest but very way too much as all of them suddenly all of the Sudden a Interplanetary Murder was into Scotland and all of the suden Alice sighten myself with three women but with the four my king oh My GOD! We cannot Stop feasting and a Drinking it is Begun they are deceased by Killing them the Newspapers reported a real intergalactic murder and the Friends reported Ancients The Cullens have broken your law and With the Denali with the Women with the Allies 's women and the Senior Volturi Guard found them Accused of InterpGalactic murder what you going to do to them Jane Alec Felix Demerti Burn the Accused of charges with the three with the turned NOW! It happened ourselves were In terrible danger Stop Queen Isabella Cullen we of the Senior Volturi guard you broke this law officially what the charge Death for turning Immortal Children is a sin FELIX! Ourselves Screamed but suddenly Attacked by Felix then suddenly Murdered us/them with the Women with our mates Murdered but suddenly torn out the Heads then suddenly RIP! But a Alien Radiance took over then Took away our Lives It's finish they are killed take them Away then it was all over then From the Holes suddenly Ripped ourselves free but with my mated daughter had Jacob's Eight Children but stopped having children but we were Executed but it went very wrong caused us to be Murdered Immortals but the rest took the as all of the bodies to the Volturi palace for them released as all of them what this this is a Highlander sword it is has the life force Dawn yes we have children Alice yes we died but how Rise your hand scream out Rixx loan me your life SOURCE Well all right Rixx LOAN ME YOUR SWORD AND LIFE SOURCE! It floated but suddenly I Grabbed it very too tightiest myself was With his life force so they what happened I Adapt but it suddenly went very wrong made us/them Completely truest Immortal oh my god killed but torn to pieces but can't die That's Amazing what are we we are different from other Vampires but as Queen I have a Royal king my royal consort they are your Senior Crystal Millennium guards our families My twin Sister with her Samoan husband with child were birthed but he was a father of Eight children we were Murdered with you but he gained Shifting powers yup a Werewolf then it happened Again a strong fiery but loudest Buzz right at into uh-oh what is it I think we are officially undead but made the Pack with families of their own Immortal Ow we have kids only Eight but stopped it was too late we were not alive anymore I am afraid the families are buried but drained with as very as all of blood with as all with our own it happened their newest Eye color Was Golden like our own that our brand-new Immortalized lives we were unable to die officially for real but Newspapers reported a Kingdom of strong Immortal warriors but the prizes as very as all of them reported a lot of Members but it was a side affect but causing us and them to slip outside but they all Vanished but Erupted more Prizes each both with the each all of the their both Exploded very too loudest but they wsere truest Volturi members but causing us/them to live a life in the past the young Vulcan woman was over One Hundred and fifty-nine years old looked Sixteen had a child myself was One hundred and Eighty-four years old looked Eighteen so my teammates who had hybrids who mated with Werewolves but suddenly had Children but stopped having children it was no more but suddenly Shunted as a teenage girl forever so they as well lost families began to hunt Animals became Vegetarian vampires but it happened made us fully-Time Immortal people but Slipped outside But was no more children but our Coven kingdom had begun here that's it I am going to transform here here goes nothing For you guys FOR THE HONOR OF GRAYSKULL! BETAZED CRYSTAL POWER! MAKE-UP! I AM SUPER SAILOR BETAZED! Suddenly a sharpes swiriling lights Then I Transformed into a Mightiest warrior Queen of all then my each both suddenly yelled TRANSFORM! All of the sudden we suddenly Ascended but became a very Fiercer but fit but strongest Warrior battle team were standing against the Volturi our cover-up story we came from Eternia a pre-warp planet to find a part of the Cosmic key the Native American pack welcomed him were very tall and Muscular grown men changed by Puberty were Hungry Again needed to rebuild what we lost but it happened caused us/them to stop living became a ancient Vampire coven kingdom the Volturi were furious but ourselves were Longest-lived Immortal species they towered over Sonvok a very nervous but frightened four point eleven inches Vulcan male terrified of his new life as a Immortal Vulcan male it happened at night Slipped right outside then crunched but crashed but ourselves were unaffected but unchanged with them but the bodies wre all gone vanished but much many more but as all caused us/them to be forever timeless it's different by now after our murder we desided to use our powers Momma mia Highlander was filmed here food sword fighting and Women CLANG! Ouch! T'Pran Crap that man is Muscular greetings welcome yourselves to Earth gladly then the officially first Contact was issued who hit you my mate our Pets killed had young poor baby Balloon you got a kitten then Shiloh Sneezed with Abby both trumpeted their noses that is going to pound your skull that's painful he grumbled he has a bad temper Chill you okay clonked me with a frying pan by my own mate Strom it was filmed here yes boy it was a very far way much more long time ago down here mister Good god I'm her Watcher yes then it happened the Cats meowed with barking Dogs ourselves powered down we wore sword-holders with magical swords with Explosion meowing he was so tiniest soon we recovered but caused a lot of changes into but within ourselves could not die were Immortal by now but had to train harder than normal we look like normal Vampires became Kindred meet him he was born here he is very small good grief Pop is the father so the other fathers Commander yes Highlander was filmed here and I Sighten graves two of them WHAT?! He had a violent temper Momma mia he was three times greater than a human being Alice what is it Volturi they are coming by numbers they think we murdered them is a knock-out vampire venom wives guards as all of the witnesses they are furious onto us/them have friends more of them killed Hulien their Aunt but we kept the Murdered hybrids under contrl had our adopted Great-grandchildren aged our coven grows but is stable but low it happened The Witness reported Aro they did this their coven/pack they all of them Crawled outside but we need more Prizes Masters they are the ones did it but had as all of them burnt to death with Immortal children with hybrids with these Lycans had them all of them killed then it happened the bodies but it happened bound in Scotland but reformed but cracked outside but they were the ones did it but a letter arrived but it vanished with the as very as all places with our next ones suddenly Exploded within The Flames with as very as all of them it Said: Dear Crystal Millennium Coven members you are unable to return home but you Broke a law you are Executed by our orders we hold these Prizes all of them Exploded but are my Assassins one step to America you will be hunted like Animals but you are undead but Immortal by the years you will not see the loved and friends are within the inbetween but it will be Destroyed it happened it was Destroyed within but as very as all of the places then went a bang Lost our bodies but it happened went Crack free of as very all of ourselves dumping the bodies but gained truest Immortality but a sudden noise but we were into a place but it was cut from here but as very tribazillions as very as all of them freed of the bodies lost to them Again each both merged with it but suddenly Exploding with as all of the cloned Animals then Shattered it all but made us to Break outside it was real but officially but safe but guarded by causing the thing to crash onto losing both now Immortalized Again but it was trapped but both merged as one city-state but was all gone but as all Vampires destroyed with the prizes were hideous mutated beings but it Cloaked us but it deactivated itself but forced to hunt Vampires it was too late it was War against both races each both declared a challenge myself was unable to die looked young in her years was royality of his word cracking with alien psionic Energy I am Immortal this is my next life of my Existance I am the ancient Vampire queen there is Only ONE! Then Music of the Highlander theme tv series I Stood sworn a Highlander vow and ancient oath to the two Connor and Your wife will be my ghostly protectors my guides I Swear to ye nay in your name of the Maccloud last of your clan I am your heir to your sword I Swear in your names your lives are preserved in your memories I Spoke in the Ancient Scottish dialect of Gaelic words very fluently but flowing but heavy but sharp and more powerfully strong then it was over Daughter you taught her words yes she is a Queen it happened the Volturi heard this Again we look mostly human but became Immortalized Vampires and Werewolves she talks funny Dawnie yes copied his words it's still here Thanks Mother the pack were hungry Again had to go on Colonial Space marine diets heard the pets resting with yo
Hoa3 chapter 8 . 1/22/2015
Please continue. Can't wait or wait...2 yrs. wow.
castlelover88 chapter 8 . 1/22/2015
Haha, your author's note amused me a lot! :'D
midnight-sun1918 chapter 7 . 7/25/2013
Please please update, I can't wait to see how the Cullens are going go react to Bella being queen.
Lionnara chapter 7 . 6/11/2013
cant wait to next when will Cullens know she spilled her secrets and when will they know they arent human( if they are at all)
twilightlovengirl chapter 7 . 6/7/2013
You should make Edward ask all these questions and then make Alice keep quite so Edward doesn't find out, then have a 3 day time skip and have Bella get her powers back and then EMMET sees her at the cerimony and he tells her to keep quite about it but he can't and Edward hears about it and well you can do the rest... But this is just an idea so yeah. But I love the story you have!
natashar chapter 5 . 11/29/2012
cant wait for more
Miss Eliza Lupin chapter 4 . 11/14/2012
Hey, good story so far, maybe this is something where you can find some extra inspiration from. It's a song called Newgrange by Celtic Woman, sung by Orla. Just type in celtic woman newgrange in youtube and you should have it immediately. By my knowledge the song's about Ireland, but with the lyrics being what they are I think you can easyly get some inspiration for your story even though it is set in Schotland not Ireland.
castlelover88 chapter 3 . 11/11/2012
This is really good! I love the idea of Bella as a queen and it's really unusual too!
Pheobe Arocis chapter 2 . 11/9/2012
This is great! I cannot wait to see how it turns out, and how the rest of them react. Please update as soon as you can!