holy shit..
kinda unrealistic, but..
i honestly dont know..
its a change..

I'm sorry man but I can't finish this story. The plot is a good idea but all of the grammar is wrong. There are all kinds of writing styles mashed into one sentence. I'm not trying dissuade you from writing but you'll need a beta or several beta readers to help you correct your mistakes. If English isn't your primary language then great try army writing this but if it is then you gotta get back in English class and relearn your English. Good luck on the story

First things first, the feels were great but I think you should develop your grammar more. This would've been amazing. Grammatical errors are just so distracting, it's a pain trying to understand them.

I like the dark themes but the characters seemed too stupid for me. I mean, Kirito can't be that stupid right? Why would he commit suicide when there's still a chance for Asuna to recover? Like what the actual hell? If it was just him deciding to avoid Asuna then that would be reasonable but suicide is just irrational. Same goes for Asuna. If they wanted happiness for each other they shouldn't commit suicide that easily.

I also worry for you. Did something happen to you during Valentines Day or you just simply love dark things? I know I do.

Anyway, don't just leave a message like 'may love take you to things like happiness and sadness'... happiness could work, sadness doesn't. Not everyone wants a fucked up and miserable story.

I wish you well.

Please make more. I love Romeo and Juliet stories it's so sad though. Awesome story :') *cries* may asuna and kirito rest in peace.

When I read this is was in tears it is so detailed I loved it , that might make me weird but I don't care that was good.:-)

Holy sh*t that is dark, and (no offense) but that was disturbing how well you described that. That was actually terrifying reading that. Just holy sh*t man, were you alright when you wrote this? Once again sorry if I offended you by asking you that but seriously! Anyways onto the review, actually pretty descripitive, you actually caught the feeling pretty good and chapter length was good, but a tad bit short. Also keep up the good work.

bullshit story...bro u need some English classes

It's a pretty good story...just sad. AND GRAMMAR! OMG that just makes the story that much harder to read!

WHAT KIND OF FUCKED UP LAST SENTENCE IS THAT?!

"Since the date of 14 February IS A DEADLY DAY for both AND WILL HAPPEN TO SOME OF YOU, thank you for reading this story and MAY LOVE TAKE YOU TO THINGS LIKE happiness AND SADNESS."

WHAT THE FUCK, MAN?!
WHO THE HELL WRITES A STORY ABOUT VALENTINES BEING A FUCKING DEADLY DAY?
WHO FUCKS UP THEIR READERS' MIND AND TELLS THEM THAT BAD THINGS WILL HAPPEN TO SOME OF THEM?
AND MOST OF ALL, WHO IN THE FUCKING WORLD WISHES OTHER PEOPLE SADNESS IN LOVE?!

YOU'RE ONE FUCKED UP BITCH, HUH?!

I cried, like, 800 times.

Was kirito mental

My boyfriend died exactly like this... I tried killing myself but I was stopped...This happened before VDay

this is awesome fiction ! and so sad too ;-;
always there's a sadness in love , and always there's a reason in
this sadness.

Nice story otaku..meet u at school

This isnt funny u mental dude even if its just a little