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Wait is this harem?, PLEASE NO

I understand why Naruto couldn't be in team 7 but then again they would make it to where Naruto was with kakashi, who has a sharingan that controlled kurama once so...I understand but I don't think the civilians would want two disgraced people to work together on the same team as well as teach Naruto the "demon"

Well naruto is much focused in interaction between his peer. That is good but not good enough. You need to integrate the element of gamer with his high intellegent. For example there is many D Rank or E rank nijutsu that useful, fuinjutsu(uzumaki legacy at the start of the game), weapon store to buy kunai, weapon or lockpick and library for purpose. I know usually people say "too OP" but that is the hurdle. By that you can set up requirement for D rank ninjutsu. That way the story will become much interesting and with his second life, naruto will be much smarter and stronger. You are trading repushou and intelegent with kage bushin and rasengan. I rather choose the latter because versality of kage bushin.

I'm not trying to just flame here but this story is just bad. The interactions seem forced, stereotypical and sometimes make no sense. Your depiction of Naruto is awful. And honestly, your plot is just boring. The whole bit with Naruto supposedly anguished over taking life do way just comes off as mild indifference. You are literally destroying his core values.

Naruto's quest didn't update after his date. Naruto not being able to perform a jutsu he knows is stupid. And if Naruto still had the nine tails then you're making chakra control way to easy.

His teammates make me immediately like this story so much less. I hate constant OC's who aren't the main character. And Ami just sucks.

The whole blushing thing was a bit ridiculous

Omg your Naruto is acting like a 5 year old while bitching about having to deal with his classmates childish antics...