Wow! That was both fluffy, sweet and oh so hot! I love it when Nanoha takes control!

So sweet

This is so sweet. If there is another tiny episode to have Hayate bump into them sleeping together on the bed, that would be even more hilarious (and embarassing).

Really tasteful tease tobstart a new day. Good job

A VERY nice COLD shower one-shot.

I look forward to more from you.

Keep up the good work.

In Love & Light,

Zona Rose };-

Nosebleed... that was hot, steamy and romantic.. you should make more :)

Hot and romantic. I love it. 3

that's hot. a bit typo here and there... nothing major. would prefer Nanoha called Fate just Fate not Fate-chan. thanks, would love to read more Nanofate fics from you.

Whoa. Even with a few spelling mistakes, that was...intense.

Well, well, soldier...

This was pretty AW3SOME!

A lazy afternoon for Nanoha in nothing but her undies turns into sweet, smexy goodness as Fate walks in one really pleasant sight, and their love finally takes over, and it. Was. Good!

I particularly enjoyed how Nanoha destroyed Fate's will to stop. *A*

Oh yes, and this was quite kinky, as well. LOL Nanoha in her underwear? Fate losing her pantyhose, skirt and panties, yet keeping her top on? Dayum. Me gusta!

My only gripe is that Nanoha didn't get hers. :C Poor girl must've been burning up, aching for Fate's touch, and she didn't get any! D:

Still, this was pretty AW3SOME! A great piece for being your 1st story! :D

Great work, Marine!

Semper-Fi! Carry on!

Even without being familiar with the characters I think this was a very well written and enjoyable lemon! I love how they curl up like kittens that had just bathed each other in the end.

wow...just after a long day of work? these two aren't even a couple and nanoha just all of a sudden ate fate out? wow! fate should have returned the favor...but then seems like fate did something in the past since nanoha said 'it's about time i returned the favor'... these two.

Wow this is your first fanfic? I am quite surprised. This is great. It would be very interesting if you make a series about Nanoha and Fate without any of the rated M things in it. :)

Wow... Hot and sweet. I really like it. I favorited this story now.