Great story! This is how I would want the series to end!

Interesting concepts, but have you considered having someone your work edited before posting? It needs a lot of work.

another great story, ok so there are a few mistakes and thinhgs that probably wouldn't happen but that doesnt make it that bad. are you planning to write more in this 'series'?, please say yes as they are really good.

Needs a LOT of editing. Also, not credible: family members, even in-laws, would never be assigned to the same station, let alone have a direct reporting relationship.