Reviews for A Bony First
soggyniptwist chapter 1 . 2/11/2019
mm yum i love bone daddy
Brent chapter 1 . 10/16/2018
this was super spicy enojyed reading will read next time my pee pee goes ting itng hh yes
LockShockBarre chapter 1 . 9/27/2018
O_O... wow
Trinity Fusetti chapter 1 . 7/31/2018
Really good but not for cinnamon buns
Rick James chapter 1 . 3/24/2018
luv it. masturbate every time
Guest chapter 1 . 11/5/2017
what the fuck did i read?! if you need me,i'm gonna go bleach my eyes.
Vincent Adams chapter 1 . 9/28/2016
I love it it's the best story I've ever read.
Anon chapter 1 . 2/25/2016
I liked the story :)
LagrimasSolitarias chapter 1 . 10/1/2015
¡AAAAAAHHH QUE HERMOSO! Hace poco me enamore de la pareja y leer algo asi de ella asido deleitoso *u* (Sagrado traductor)
Thatonechick chapter 1 . 9/10/2014
Jack is a skeleton, how does he do it? Lol.
Kittin chapter 1 . 2/3/2014
Okay. Firstly, I enjoyed. BUT...
I have a few, lets call them concerns.
1) Is Sally's "smell" autumn?
2) You mentioned Seed. Are we talking pumpkin... Sunflower what's going on here? Cuz clearly, there lacks some bodily fluid. Not to mention, ya know everything else. Like balls.
3) You said his pants tightened. With what exactly? His ghost penis? Your lack knowledge of general male anatomy. Cuz he's missing some equipment, and some of the important functions to raise said equipment.
4) Speaking of which. Let's talk about Sally. You do realize that she is stuffed. She lacks the blood to make her cheeks "blush" and also the other bodily fluids to make her "wet".
5) Lets talk about lips. He can't suck on nipples, that likely can't even get hard when made out of rucksack, while lacking lips. He. Is. A. Skeleton. And again, I reiterate, she is made of rucksack. Her lips cannot be moist.

I know this is a work of fiction, and I greatly appreciate your writing style. The friends and I just had a couple problems with your logic.

Thank you. Have a nice day.
Guest chapter 1 . 8/18/2013
Not bad. But u do know that jack HAS no um,
Thing,right? Btw, u were right on with jack about to drool, I saw that comin. I'm a girl, just to be clear. I LOVE TNBC!
TheSoundOfAWESOME chapter 1 . 6/6/2013
Oh my gosh, you have Jack down PERFECTLY :D I couldn't help but read it in his voice and the way you write echoes his speech patterns as if he'd written this himself!
JJ chapter 1 . 11/5/2012
I got a bloody nose from this. Cute!
MadMadysonn chapter 1 . 11/3/2012
KYAAAAAA! :D People like it! I would've made it more descriptive but I was unsure on what Jack's member would be like... btw, my bf totally helped on a guy's POV with this ;) Gotta love them bfs
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