I caught up! and I am once again addicted to this story. Congratulations on the birth of your two little ones as well :D

As per the writing style just drags me in and I absolutely love it. I like the slightly more mature Edward when dealing with Envy :) It shows how much he has grown as an adult.
Looking forward to seeing the mystery with "her" resolved as well :D

(This was meant to be a review for Chapter 22 but it said I had already reviewed that one)

I just started reading this story today and couldn't put it down! I really really can't wait to see the direction you take this story and I am hoping that you bring Al in for a little part! But it is your story and can go whichever way you want it to.

ii wish you would continue this it was a really good story

Hello, I have recently (in the week between Christmas and New Year) read Exam Lab 32, Monster, Darkness Within, Crushed and now have caught up to Coming Undone. I have absolutely loved these stories. I love your writing style where you have no qualms between switching points of view, time and location without having to put a little header in case people get lost, it makes the story seamless. It constantly kept me wanting more and it felt like I was reading a professionally written story. I will PM you at some point, would really like to know how this story ends.

I'm sorry you don't want to continue the story because of lack of reviews. I feel bad that I haven't, I really liked all your stories though. But, I can understand where you're coming from, I'd love to read the rest though.

i understand that you don't want to continue without feedback, but i would love to read the rest of this story and finish off the trilogy

I do hope you get back to this story. Very interesting plot developments. I do love the relationship between Ed and Roy. I have enjoyed it so far, though I was quite tempted not to read it when it was mark discontinued.

As a fellow author I understand your frustration at not getting any reviews. I hope you will come back to write this story.

It is a shame to see stories be discontinued. I think you are a really great author, and even if you do not continue this story, I hope that you do continue to write!

I really like this story! :(

Sorry for not reviewing though, but I usually read on a e-reader browser which makes it hard to review. I feel bad now.

I won't be mad if you stop writing this though. Writing only for reviews is stressful, and if you hate it so much, it would probably be better to spend your free time doing something you enjoy.

hahahhahaha...I have to admit, little rambunctious Ed is no more. jajajaja
Both human and homunculus have grown up!
At first, when Al was so obviously a fake-Al, I was "wtf?... why and how are Envy (and Lust) alive?!", but by the end of the chapter their familiarity with each other, even when fighting, made me roll my eyes and laugh! specially the last three lines!.. I can just imagine it sooo well.
Well, they have matured... but that didn't take out the hilarious...

Always, dying to know what you make out of this.
Thank you! -

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Amber

This is getting sooo weird… this is some really well constructed conspiracy….
I'm really intrigued.
On a side note, I kind of liked the rearrangement of chapters… quite different from your others stories…
Thank you, Heachan.
I hope to hear from you soon.

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Amber

It's me, Otakumom (Connie)...finally got caught up. I love all your work, so this is one more to love. Very good. Your always coming up with great new ideas for Edward and the crew! 3

I'm sorry heachan, but this is making no sense and you have completely lost me at this point. And I suspect I'm not the only one. Are you alternating times again? Because it really isn't working for this story. You need to rewrite everything after the first chapter. That first chapter is really good and had me excited to read this fic, but now its too confusing, and what the heck was with the random surprise sibling? I was taking this series as a possible post- brotherhood fanfic, but a hidden sibling throws that out the window. Also, a few of the chapters had cliff hangers that weren't continued in the next, this means build up and no payoff.

I was expecting a fic exploring how ed would deal with killing someone and how that effects his relationship with his family while investigating the guy who tried to kill him. I have yet to read a fic that handles the ed killing someone situation well. I would love it if you could write a good story out of this, especially considering his kids are involved. Please rewrite this, and you may find that your audience comes back.

after all that jumping back and forth, your story is finally making sense. i'm enjoying it but there are small grammatical errors that throw me off. But i have to admit your other story crushed was v. good.

Keep going with your story. You're good
Don't worry if you don't get many reviews.. I'm sure lots of people read your story anyway!
I like your story and I like your "style".. so I'd love to read more chapters :)
Bye!
Kgm92