great hilarious even, but boy does it give me a headache.

This commentary is hilarious, but I just wanted to point something out.

"If they're in high school, then she's got to be at least 10-16 so she shouldn't be able to drive"

Actually, in American high school, most people start their freshman year at 14, and graduate at 17-18(depending on when their birthday is). Since Caroline is a junior in this story, she would be 16-17. The age when you can get your driver's license in most states is 16(some states allow a learner's permit at 15 1/2, but a parent must supervise at all times), and some of my classmates were already driving when I was a junior in high school(and some of the older students in my grade were driving when I was a sophomore).

So Caroline would be old enough to drive, but she wouldn't have much experience, so she probably shouldn't be driving so fast that their "hare was blowing in the breeze".

I hope that cleared some stuff up.

(Also, if P-body stared at Marissa's "bobs" and then hooked up with Atlas later in the story, then that would make her bisexual, not a lesbian. A lesbian only likes women but a bisexual likes both men and women.)

Waaaambulance that's the best snark ever, I laughed my head off when I first read it.

Oh my god, this is fucking hilarious! :')
In the earlier chapters, I had the same thought about the companion 'cuub' or 'coob' however she spelt it, and when I read your reaction it made me laugh.
Had me giggling on my own on the bus to and from work today :')

This shockingly, comes close to 'My Immortal' which is terrifying. Also I find it amusing but the constant 'buggering', 'sodding' and whatever else she thinks we british say is slightly grating.

Either way, I am loving your commentary x'D so favouriting this

I'd like to point out that American keyboards or at least all the ones I've seen have the ~ is right next to the 1/! key

This is gonna sound so pedantic, but "deadpan" is an actual verb. She used and spelled it correctly.

This is a riot and i'm laughing so hard right now. I especially like the commentary on "o-mouth." It gets me every time.

Yay! So happy to see an update.

as much as I hate to defend Marissa I own and love tf2 and I didn't even realize that valve had given them actual names

No you can die. It's an actual thing called F.L.O.B.F. (Fatal Lack Of British Food) there's also an American one.

Cannot wait for the next update. This series is hilarious.

The only reason why I'm going to survive this whole mess is because of the perfect commentary.

god i'm confused
but
death to marissa

CG, you may just be the Yahtzee Crosshaw of fanfics this site needs. And seeing as you are about to suffer through ANOTHER Marissa fanfic, I will pray to the gods of writing that you come out unscathed and read one of the sites 10% good fics to help recover from the inevitable aneurysms.

Good luck, you'll need it.

Oh my, poor you. Glad to know the trademark Mary Sue is absent... hopefully...
Return of the toilet fetish. And the love-making fetish. And the o-mouth. (unhhh) And the absence of proper terms. And basically everything else I won't bother saying to keep this review a bit shorter...
And I certainly hope we won't see Tweedlearse and Tweedlehole.
Okay, is Harry seriously going to become, uh, however you spell his name? Wheatley? Yeah. (I can barely remember how to spell his name. It's all Marissa's fault.