I cri ;( i would take up the sorry but,
1. I suck at writing
2. I have to free time
&
3. Im not a good story-rewritter
I still cri, it twas a good story.

Wow so this was not exactly just like in the summary

: *(

...you make no sense at all!

coolio

Good start!

Karrine sounds neat!

I suggest indenting between lines. It makes it easier to read. Update soon!
-dixi