Thrilling story filled with laughs, anger, joy, and heart wrenching sorrow. Looking forward to where you took this story in the following books.

a true author must not let their feelings get in the way of the story. they must understand and empathize with their characters no matter how different they are. whether they are the villain or the hero. authors recreate the world, so they must observe and understand the world. if you can only craft from your experiences then you're just a writer. you're not writing a modified autobiography; you are unleashing creativity and imagination.

i suppose you're just an ff writer, you don't create a whole new world and characters, with complex point of views. but there are fanfiction authors that have potentials, when they try to truly understand the characters and world, that someone create and gave it a whole new meaning. that was a fanfiction well done.

in your case, i still agree that you have the ability to describe well. though you have a serious lack of creativity. i suggest you be a journalist. this whole fanfiction series you write is like a rehearsal of describing what you saw in the manga, books, or perhaps also the anime to you. i prefer reading and to act, than watching. i have such a huge appreciation with arts and beauty. of the written form mostly, i rely on my imagination a lot. and observing the world slowly.
i appreciate the descriptions as the manga lack it

Tbh, Itachi Uchiha, Minato, Kushina, Haku, Tenten, Rock Lee, are the only characters that I really like in the Naruto manga series. The rest I'm indifferent, and some I dislike.
I also like and dislike orochimaru and kabuto, perhaps Sasuke too sometimes, the scholar in me is agreeing to some of their beliefs. Orochimaru's desire to be immortal to learn for eternity...

Naruto while he's such a ball of sunshine sometimes, is also a damn hypocrite. And I tend to dislike those types. Overall, I slightly like him. And in stories(ff) where he's not some self-help author hypocrite, that's where I really, really like Naruto.

Neji: There is fate and destiny
Naruto: It didn't exist. You can fight it. Change it.
Some toad: you are the chosen one, Naruto.
Harry: really?

In Harry Potter, you cannot become a great wizard, if you don't work on it. But Naruto is close to being a racist book as they focus on inherited traits. And stereotypes is so vast; they expect the children of the clans to be what the clan represented them to be. Like what a stupid world, do they even allow their children to pursue their own ways, perhaps develop unique techniques so different from their family secret techniques, combining and learning knowledge until they become original. And a truly unique human being.

But no, they're copy-cats of their parents or mentors most of the time. I just adore people who refused to be one of the herd. Deep and unconventional. Breakers of the norm.. A truly complex human being. By activating and using their full capacity as they can, they become what the philosophers describe as the higher beings for truly they become more than animals, and discovered what is like to become human.

My god. I'm still waiting...for some sort of change! I'm expecting creativity in this story because of the insert of magic, but still you're a complete copy-cat. Almost every single details are the same. We just hear some more of their thoughts as you describe them more and add something. It's like you have no plot of your own aside from the canon's story structures.

Still, i'm hoping you'll somehow improve. Right now, I have time to kill and didn't mind much rereading basically Naruto as this is similar enough, though of course I just skip a lot when I already what's going to happen. I still refused to believe that you'll just throw the potential of the story. At the very least, you describe well.

if there's a romance in this story, I cannot say it'll end well if you follow canon. As the Naruto series is one of the stories that I've ever known that is most appalling in describing anything romantic. At least insert some character development. Something. Sure, I don't mind seeing (or reading) problematic relationships that might as well end in divorce, cause it happens, as most people are idiotic enough to marry someone they don't completely trust. But when it comes to the main character, most of the time, depending on the type of story, I dislike seeing them in a shallow intimate relationship, when they are the hero or the source of inspiration, or this really wise and clever human, and fall into the most common traps: claiming love when it's lust. Marrying them. And a significant amount of their life is wasted and miserable. This rarely happens in the truly wise men. Of course, exceptions exist.

Another, if this is NaruHina, add more than the canon, but don't start in romance, but in trust, as this Naruto is smart enough, surely someone in the fictional world must know common sense. Or perhaps the authors should stop relying in stereotypes and start to know the characters they give life to, like they're their best friends. If I sense that, and I usually does in the books I read, I always became a fan of their works as I can recognize whether a certain book has a genuine soul.
I must say this is so rare. Few authors dedicated much time knowing their characters and their cultures. But this hard work, made their works stand out, and undoubtedly became a masterpiece that even an idiot or racist or whatever can somehow enjoy.

That was awesome.

I dont get why naruto doesnt use kurama

It ain't about how hard you hit it's about how hard you can get hit -Rocky- from 2006 movie Rocky Balboa.
Naruto will go to distance.

i really like the scene where naruto set the place on fire and the idea that he can walk through it.
:D i would look forward to see sasuke and kakashi for their unnecessary entrance. sasuke is really a bastard... for one moment I really hope that he would not receive the curse to stop him from being much more bastard than ever. i hope he would not drink again while underage. and mostly not to smoke weed.

she always does that. she never listen. sakura you are worst character out there.

whatever ... kakashi is bastard too. everytime i watched this season I found him annoying. he's more focused to sasuke.

ok finally some true differences from the show how will things play out with the third still alive? are you playing the dumbledore angle and the old man has one year to live but no one or few know the truth? or is the old man just fine? will he still order the lady of the sanin back to take his place? I trully am exited to see how it turns out so lets find out.

I feel like there is a bit of a conflict with your story in this chapter. when you mentioned that naruto retaines the memories of his clones Naruto was surprised. however didn't he use that to his advantage in the forest of death? other than that I think this is a great chapter

That was bloody brilliant! I loved reading this, especially the note Naruto left

Sasuke... Sasuke... You're such a manipulative bastard... *saying it in a fake-disappointed voice*

Wonderful!
Update immediately, please!