Love this story! Thank you for authoring it :)

Actually the second sentence should be: Y tú ERES un gorrdito not ES.

It's 2:34am, I promised myself I'd go to bed early, I promised myself I wasn't going to cry. Promises were made to be broken.

I love your story, I couldn't stop reading on. You're such a very talented story-teller that it was hard to believe this was a fanfiction and not a book up for an international prize.

I'M READY.

F-fin? But... You never addressed Alfred's mum and him meeting Artie's brothers and why he can speak Spanish and shtuff... *cries*

*Is actually crying for both Matthew and Arthur*

I mean, I don't have American parents, so I've been punished worse than just being grounded for a few hours as a child, so I dunno what I'm crying for... Except your writing skills. ,o,

Man, they are such good parents. Honestly, I feel like taking down notes! XD

I'm really happy that you didn't just google translate that whole passage in French and paste it into your story like most other people do. Google translate not only sucks, but it's also just a huge distraction. I was just going to go to the next chapter and say this when I finished the story, but I really just wanted to commend you for that, and I couldn't risk forgetting. Thank you!

very good

:D Yay! Feliciano's going to be in this! I wonder if Germany'll follow. I hope so. Awesome job on this chapter. I like how Edith thinks, and that the solutions given apply o real life an could actually work.

Do you realize how adorable the bathroom scene with Matthew and Arthur is? Do you?! It's one of the most adorable things I've ever read. And the scene afterwards with Francis and Arthur...Eh...SO. Awesome. I love it.

MHM. I really do hope that you put Arthur's brothers into this story. That would be cool. And t looks like there are some more problems arising, but now with Matthew. It's interesting to see this new development play out.

"So Alfred breathed fire at the world."
I don't know why, but that sentence really clicks with me. That whole section right there is my favorite part in this story so far. It's awesome, really. I like how it describes how Alfred is now, and what he thinks.

Aw. This image...s' so adorable. I think I got cavities from imagining this scene. And I can't wait to see a confrontation between Arthur and Alfred's father. Should be interesting. I also like how you're making Arthur react to all of this. He shows a softer, more whimsical side that I've only seen in Francis. I thought that Francis would be acting like Arthur and vice versa on reaction to the situation. But I like how you've written both men.

See, it's cool how you write from a child's point of view. Sometimes the simplicity of things put into a child's viewpoint explains things better than normal writing or fancy descriptions. My favorite in here was the description of Arthur's eyes. It's very well-written. However, I've noticed some errors. Small stuff, like a place that needs a comma or a mis-use of grammar. Nothing big.