I loved this story. The characters were well defined and the plot gathered in intensity to the climax. Good job! I was concerned about the spelling so I went to your beginning site. I then admired your English, and was impressed by how well you used it. Spelling was a small point and was overwhelmed by your skill in telling a story in a different language. Lovely.

WELL DONE!

Thank you

Thanks for sharing. It was wonderful. It would be even more wonderful if it was proof read.

lol. I'm from the USA and I don't know very much about football.

I just don't understand why everyone is always trying to get Bella laid. Why do they even care?

Thanks for writing this great story!

Ooooh! What’s gonna happen!?1500 a month in child support, they should both count themselves lucky lol. Her because she didn’t want any and him because we were paying $1000 a month for one child and we’re not pro football players lol!

Now that the parents are out of the way, I’m worried what Jessica and Lauren will say. Based on her description of Lauren I feel like she’s gonna cause some drama!

Phew! That went better than expected. I hope Esme and Carlisle are as understanding.

Oh man. Just from the prologue and this chapter I can feel the drama storm that’s going to ensue. He’s going to think she trapped him, she’s gonna want to raise it independently... I can’t wait!

Pssh... nobody likes da Bears

Very cute stories, grea job with the English!

Good start

This was an absolutely perfect ending to such a wonderful tale. I wondered if English was your second language but, did not want to say anything at all. I am quite impressed with how ell you did. Yes, it was riddled with things that were typed out phonetically in lieu of correctly but. it was easily overlooked as the story was so good. I truly enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing your imagination with us here. ~Christy