This was a great story. I wish the writer would come back and update it.

I don't get how Videl know that Saiyaman is Gohan. I didn't follow.
Videl was kissing Saiyaman then uttered "GOHAN" , then she cried because she learned that she said Gohan instead of Saiyaman. Then Saiyaman flew her into her room. The next thing i know they are talking about the Z fighters then Saiyaman saying it that they are relatives.

So that means that when Saiyaman said that they are relatives, she knows about Son Goku, she arrives at the conclusion that Saiyaman is a SON, and he's Gohan? Is that how it is?

I'm so disappointed that there isn't anymore chapters :(
I've really enjoyed this, it's fun, well written and I would love to read more. I hope you haven't abandoned this story and will eventually come back and finish it. I really want to know who the big bad is.

J'aime.

i like it so far cant wait for the next chapter

I might have startled my flatmate by grinning manically and bursting out laughing while reading this... now they think I'm going crazy with exam stress... I blame your fic for being so funny : )

Interesting... Proceed...

Well, Idk what happened, but it seems like you got rid of a chapter because this one I though was supposed to be 11, but it showed up as 10... Anyway.

Great chapter! Glad to see some training and Gohan/Videl interaction. Update soon!

Not a bad chapter, but I thought the fighting comments were a bit shallow.

Nothing on sensing energy levels or assessing techniques. Just a quick comment about her punch.

Anyway this will be the last Individal chapter review until I'm done.

Your reasoning for why Goku should come back was really poor.

Quote from Gohan "this for can destroy whole planets"

Vegeta could do that when he was first introduced. Heck piccolo and master roshi could destroy the moon which is the size of a small planet, when they were order introduced as well. Destroying planets isn't new.

Your writing is decent. However in this first chapter I don't see any depth to your writing. As you said in the prologue... 'My writing is breezy'. But, there was no strong breeze, in this chapter.

Anyway I'll give It a few more chapters before I decide wether or not to continue. The idea is sound, but almost too structured. There is no flow, just discrete steps.

Good just reread the story after you put up two new chapters and have to say its still really good. Please keep up the good work. I hope you update again soon.

Great chapter! Not any training, but still some good interaction. Update soon!

Great story so far ) look forward to the next chapter!

Awesome chapter.

Nice chapter I'm loving this story