So adorable! I always love lucissa story back in their hogwarts days. Kudos to you!

This was adorable! I think their cantor was perfect.

Oh my gosh, wow. This is amazing.
The only thing that is unclear is what Dumbledore, Slughorn and McGonagall are doing down in the courtyard. Is there even a balcony at Hogwarts? (Not criticizing you at all on that part, by the way, I love the fact they went onto a balcony.)
That is all.

Interesting story, but are Narcissa's eyes really blue? I thought they were dark like her sister's... And I honestly thought it was a little strange that she would tell Lucius that she has never kissed a man or been out on a date. You would think she just would have said, "that's really none of your business". Even if she were just playing with him.

Hmm. Interesting. I like the idea, and it is well executed.

However, saying that, I feel that it could be improved slightly. You say 'the blonde' or the 'platinum haired' one time too many and I'm not entirely sure that hiding from the professors makes Narcissa a 'perfect Slytherin'... I'd say more of a reckless Gryffindor, for almost getting caught in the first place! :) Slytherins would be much more sneaky, I think.

One more thing... when Narcissa and Lucius were talking, it was a bit too formal and distant. They were talking about Narcissa's personal life, and he was saying 'May I ask why?'. It needed to be slightly less formal and polite.

Rena
Anyway, good job overall. A good, enjoyable read, and keep writing :)

Young Narcissa and Lucius fluff! Made my day :3

Really sweet! Great job

Great job :) I loved the way you portrayed their romance, it was really sweet.

Ahh! I love it :) There is not much out there for Lucius and Narcissa school age (you know, Lucius pops up in every Draco romance story as the villain) So this is a nice change :) Very well done!