| Reviews for The Gift of Death |
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Jimm chapter 1 . 11/2/2018 i love it :) |
Ravenpuffdoor chapter 19 . 2/2/2017 Can't wait for more! A mini cliff hanger makes me hungry for more! |
Babymac chapter 19 . 11/30/2016 I love this story so much Just the possibility of them being back makes me thrilled! But anyway, I like that Harry is starting to move toward thinking about Ginny and if his parents have another kid, rather than just focusing on their existence |
Jess Chen chapter 18 . 3/6/2016 I hope this fic doesn't end up bashing Snape? He's the way he is for a reason ...at least that's my opinion. He can't be seen as nice...and I don't think Harry knows yet that James bullied Snape when they were younger |
Guest chapter 9 . 2/26/2016 This would have been an excellent point to end chapter 2. |
Guest chapter 3 . 2/26/2016 These 3 chapters dhould be combined into one. Future chapters should be a minimum of 2,000 - I'd rather see 3,000. It shows a serious intent to proceed. Writing is hard and to continue at any point will become difficult. |
Babymac chapter 17 . 6/15/2015 At first I wasnt sure I would like it, but in the end I really did! The concept of them coming back to life kind of made me wary but it was pretty good. Well done! |
TheChosenOne chapter 17 . 6/4/2015 OMG this story is great! It really goes into the detail about what it would actually be like for harry to suddenly have his parents back after 14-15 years of being an orphaned child. Can't fault it, it is awesome |
BARON2462 chapter 17 . 6/4/2015 good chapter I am really liking this story |
GrossGirl18 chapter 17 . 6/4/2015 This story is pretty good, and so far I've really enjoyed it. The plot is interesting, and even though the chapters are short, they're fairly well written. I recommend you get a beta to proof read for you, because I think it could make your writing even better. There are two things in particular I notice you sometimes do: using too many commas in a sentence and telling the readers about things they already know. For example, you didn't have to actually go through a description of what happened in Harry's first through fourth years at Hogwarts because you can assume that we the readers already know all that. On that same thread, You didn't have to recap the events in the Dursley's house. Even though it happened at a different time, the scene remained unchanged, and could have been mostly skipped over. As a general rule of thumb, if you have more than two commas in a sentence, break it up into more than one sentence. Those run on sentences make your writing sound a bit juvenile, and they make things harder to read. The obvious exception to this rule is lists. If John, Julie, Jack, and Jill are going to the store to buy, bread, butter, jam, and milk, it's obviously okay to have all those commas there. The two comma rule should only apply when you're using it to break up a sentence. Overall, I've really enjoyed this story so far, and I hope you continue it soon! |
Jess Chen chapter 16 . 5/30/2015 Omg yes! I thought this fanfic would never be updated ever again! Thank you for updating! Can't wait for more |
McFlyandTwinkies chapter 15 . 8/15/2014 I love this story. But the chapters are a bit short. Please hurry up with the next chapter. I want to know what else happens. Very Good Story. |
Jess Chen chapter 14 . 5/18/2013 Update please! |
Nevada chapter 15 . 2/20/2013 I love this story, you should definitely keep it up. |
Jess Chen chapter 15 . 1/8/2013 please update soon! |