Melon should definitely mother them all and she should end up with both Goku and Vegeta

Your OC is a fucking idiot. No brains at all. Tell the purist Saiyan that you’re the last female of his race, why don’t you? Fucking imbecile.

I expected more from her, but she’s just all bark an no bite, no strategy. Absolutely nothing, just a useless smart mouth. She’s a disappointment, really.

Goku has no people skills, seriously. What married man goes into a bathroom with a naked woman, not his wife, in it?

Goku could learn how to cook instead of wait for his wife and friends to be served.

Stop mistaking “Your” with “You’re”, for fuck’s sake!
I’m not even an English speaker and I can tell the difference. Geez... it’s such an annoying mistake.

Lots of grammar errors and misspellings in this chapter.
Also, it was completely unnecessary to say her hair looks like Halibel’s. What was your point? Can’t you just describe her normally, instead of resorting to such childish tactics? It shows poor writing, lack of imagination and maturity.

What’s with her not freaking out? She was magically transported to a fictional and dangerous world with no reason or explanation whatsoever and she’s just fine with this insanity? Especially if we consider that she’s pretty weak compared to all superpowered heroes?

Honestly, this plot is a mess and I don’t feel like wasting my time here. Sorry.

I love this story! The revised one also.
I really hope you can continue it soon I would love to know how melon ended up inthe pod with Vegeta!
Oh my god! Great last chapter! Such a tease on what can happen- I hope I get to read how they get there.
Happy Easter!

I hope you not stop now plz more

Ok well first of all GAWD DAMN SON. I can not get enough of your writing style, seriously. I LOVE how descriptive you are, I have yet had to reread anything because it just makes sense. I'm super impressed.
Also . SMUT. HOLY HELL VEGETA. I can't fucking wait to read more of this, I'll be praying for the next chapter

I binged this whole thing in under a day. But none the less I’ll be following your new one, and thankfully you have this up until you’re caught up on that one so I have an idea of what chapter it will be up to date with his one by. If that makes sense xD

Though if anything I was confused with the smut, because the chapter before that they were fighting and suddenly it was like they were okay with Vegeta. None the less love your writing and can’t wait for more.

Ahh I miss this story so much

I am Vegelon all the way!

Wicked! Is there another chapter for this story?

Vegelon! Yay~~ This is one of my favourite Dragon Ball fics, and definitely one of the best. I can't wait to read more, thank you!

I vote for the triad.