very cute

Good storyline please continue

Good job Caden! I hate L'gann he is a total shabonka (a VERY VERY VERY bad word me and my friend made up) He's totally rude to Connor and M'gann are 3rd fav couple (my first is Batgirl and Nightwing/Robin 2nd is Spitfire!) but yh I hate L'gann

update please :)

more, i love ur book

I LOVE IT ! ITS SO CUTE HOW CONNER IS A UNCLE/OLDER BROTHER !

kick his butt caden love it

I like it.

please continue

Since La'Gann got burned , would that be considered the teams first fish fry ? Drop him in a pot of boiling water next , he seems kind if crustation to me like a crab or lobster . Though I don't think even Wolf would want to eat him, hahaha .

Nice start but i agree, save authors note to before or after
Keep it up

I'm loving it already! And you're right no one likes him! :)

Please do not put author's notes in the middle of your narration. It interrupts the flow of the story and pulls the reader out of it. Save the commentary until then end of the chapter (or place it in the beginning if you prefer).