It's so cute!

At towards the end of this chapter, you say "fisted".

Fisting is when someone sticks an entire hand up someone else's anus or vagina.

Just for further reference.

This is the second time I read this fic, although I'm not sure I had finished it the first time, but I'm so glad I found it again. Exactly what I had been looking for: something sweet and funny and fluffly, in character and not too long. I laughed and smiled so much; I'd recommend it to anyone. Thanks for sharing!

Hahaha!

Aw, I really loved this entire series, especially "Nasty Surprise". They were all short, sweet and wonderful.

That was a wonderful ending for a wonderful story! Great job!

Ha! The endings of these are the best part, that little play on words that Riza said was brilliant! :)

Two concrit things. One: try having more thoughts instead of just narrating. I don't know, maybe it's just my opinion, but I think maybe you could have had a bit more fun by writing Riza's thoughts in Italics like, "Wait...is that coffee? Who's making it? Hayate?" But this is your story, so you write the way you think is best.

Also (and this is just me being incredibly nitpicky) I think maybe you ought to change the ingredient to flour or something like that. Pepper is black, how could Roy not notice it wasn't sugar? But then it is Roy after all. :D

This was much better, and funnier too. You capture Roy's playfulness well. However, I still think your word count could be tightened and your diction strengthened. Like, "Roy and Riza stopped what they were doing." Please don't be offended, but that sounds boring. Try a nice powerful verb like, "They froze" or "They jumped" or something like that. I recommend using a thesaurus to keep from sounding dull or repetitive; it's helped me tremendously.

That last line just killed me. XD And Riza being happy that he stayed was very insightful too.

I will be honest though, I saw quite a few typos. Mostly lack of capitalization and improper endings like "Work was demanded her attention." Also I think "irritated her so much she was afraid she might hurt him" needs to be re-worded. Be more specific, "hurt" sounds too broad. Like maybe say, afraid she might smack him or something. It will make your sentence stronger.

i'm sad to see this story go :( every time a notice came up saying there was a new chapter, i got so excited! i can't wait to read something else by u!

Hahahaha this story is stupid funny and that's what makes this story awesome.

thank you, you made my day ;)

:D AWWW This was a very cute and sweet ending! I loved all thier mornings together :) I'll have to check your other story out.

Great one! Write more!

Ahhahahahahahah! Riza must have done it on purpose!

Aww poor Ed...But I did laugh at his misery XD good job once again haha :D