how dare u kill off loki and kill the baby and make bruce seem like a jerk and ruin bruces relationship

Amazing I loved it so much that I reviewed and I never do that this is the first time ever but I love coleen sososososososo much and banner as well I think her innocence really captivates everyone I hope you write a book or something cos I would so read it thanks for your amazing contribution to the litirary world!

0-o WTF I DONT EVEN...

I thought this was a Burce and oc love story not an tony and oc story

Where to begin? The writing style has shifted so much that it's become bi-polarized. At first, I thought this was a fanfic focused between interactions between your orginal character and Bruce but then you decide to switch it up without so much of a notice? I've gone through most of your writings and the pattern is that all of the characters magically and irrevocably fall in love or lust with the desired original character. That's okay for those who read Mary Sue type fictions but pulling random ideas out of the hat won't generate enough fan base or create a remarkable story.

Truly, every author can improve and has the potential to fix errors in their story. As a reader, here are some of the things I've noticed that need to be worked on. 1) Let's be realistic: not everyone you're going to meet is going to instantly like/love you. It's the real world. So that poses a question as to why Colleen seems to feed off all this attention thorought the story. What's your focus? Is it all about the fillers or is there a deeper meaning going on? 2) As far as her "powers" as a sort of a relatable feature to the Avengers Initiative, isn't the way to go around it. Just because one is a convincing liar doesn't mean they're taken into a secret government agency. If you could chose a better introduction as to why she's even considered to join S.H.I.E.L.D. would lessen the confusion in the beginning chapters. 3) When using an original character, there should be original dialogue and original action. For instance, Colleen takes Natasha's place and uses almost the same words she uses in the movie when talking to Bruce in the shack. Make it interesting and engage a different side of her that strikes her different than the other thousand Avengers stories.

4) Switching love interests is a suitable idea. But when the change is too quickly or there's no foreshadowing, it gets to be too much for readers. At the very least you should provide multiple perspectives of what the character(s) are going through in their minds versus a third person limit point of view. 5) Chapter 11 needs to be tossed out or rewritten. There was no subtle change from the beginning to the very depressing end. It could be an extremely good chapter but not with the set up you've done in the last 10 chapters. 6) I heavily advise you start with character analysis on Tony AND Bruce. Some of their movements or what they say don't add up. Fill in the lost details: Why is Bruce so ready to love when he's secluded himself? Where is Pepper and how is she not playing a role? Things like that need to be addressed in the BEGINNING rather than let us continually guess and make up our own conclusions.

Those were some of the things I found and thought to inform you. Don't take this as a flame or anything below that. I'm offering constructive criticism which is highly advised on this site. I'm sure your other readers can agree with some of the forementioned points and implore you to take them as suggestions. Best of luck to all your endeavors!

this awesome CONFIRM CONFIRM!

I thought this was a Bruce/OC story, not a Tony/OC story.

awe! :)

Oh this was well written, depressing yes, but well done. I wanted her to end up with Tony so I am actually glad that he manned up and confessed his feelings in more than a dirty minded way. :)

AWWWWW! it's so sad! but it was an amazing chapter, great job! so is she going to end up staying with tony? or is it still a bruce/oc story?

I like it but is this a tony/oc fanfic now?

Wooo! Tony x Colleen ftw :)

OH, MY, MOTHER, FUCKING, GOD! YOU HAVE SUCCESSFULLY KILLED ME INSIDE! I AM NOW A HOLLOW, BROKEN, WITHERED, DEAD HUMAN BEING! I ONLY LIVE NOW ON LIFE SUPPORT, YOU'VE KILLED MEH!

Colleen reminds me or a cat my Grandma used to have named Colleen; she was so cuddly and sweet, that the Colleen from this story reminds me of her :) What i find even more funny is that the dog in the story is named Buddy and my cat is named Buddy lol

its a good story so; i really like is XD

Oh my gosh , this chapter made me weep so much... WHY DID LOKI HAVE TO DIEEE!
WHYYYYYYYYYYYYY ! :'(
Your story has got to be one of the few that aren't as cliche as the other Avengers fanfics are... so an invisible lollipop granted for you!
Ughh.. I'm still recovering from Loki's death. Again, I absolutely worship your story orginality and I'll look forward to your upcoming chapters! :)