I wish this story wasn't dead.

A great story with well thought character development

genius!~~~~~~~

somehow people who writes code geas fanfiction, always end up being lazy, or die of a horrible accident.

It's sad to see that this story was probably dropped xc but I'd still like to tell you I enjoyed reading the story and wished there were more .

I really hope you didn't abandon this story it's the best code geass fan fict ever

Please update again!

Chapter 8 Omg the ending had me so giddy when Zero and Cc finished each others lines

I really loved this, really hope that it gets an update soon :)

I'm waiting for next chapter
Keep up the good work 3 NomNom~

This is a great story, looking forward to more.

Please update the story.

Ooh, haven't updated since 2004? When are you going to update? D:

Anyhoo, my review:

At the start, it was a somewhat... boring.

Cons:

1) Pacing
Most of the time, canon events stayed roughly the same, only with C.C. becoming more active. But it wasn't boring because C.C. decided to stick to the script (most of the time), but more because of the storytelling. I think that it was redundant to write the canon events when we can just watch the show. There were a lot of times where you could simply have glossed over things that happened exactly the same as before, and show the things C.C. did do differently and the butterfly effects those made.

2) Information Dumps
I like that C.C. volunteered a lot of info that would've helped Lulu at the start, but storytelling-wise, I think that a lot of peeps without Lulu's IQ had their eyes glaze over. Split some paragraphs, add some little actions that indicate what the characters are doing while talking (maybe a little fidget or break of eye contact here and there to show C.C.'s discomfort of telling the truth) to keep things interesting. Make our eyes 'rest' and prevent exhaustive walls of text.

3) OOC-ness
Lulu getting flustered when confronted with teases about girls is acceptable. C.C. stuttering... not so much. I think she has her own pride of being ancient and all that. Blushing, okay, that's a good, acceptable sign, but she'll probably maintain eye contact to challenge the teaser, then hide her small grin. Or maybe she'll just look away. Being opening flustered or stuttering, I think, should be reserved for special occassions when C.C. is caught off-guard.

4) Abraham
Er, he/it/them(?) just don't swell awesomely with me.

5) Walls of Italic Text
This one is simply a pet peeve of mine. I dislike walls of italic text because they hurt my eyes. There are lots of ways to show a flashback without

Pros:
1) The Things C.C. Did Differently...
I love the irony between the names of Infinity and Zero. I love how the Black Knights now have a female leader to look up to (it would be nice to see more influence Infinity has; maye she unknowingly empowers women?). The

2) ... And Their Effects
C.C. becoming a part of their family officially? C.C. getting more relationships and friends? Kallen becoming Lulu's best girl-bud? Nunnally becoming friends with Rolo? Euphemia the Martyr Princess?

Awesome.

Even the negative effects! Actually, the part where C.C. became a prisoner of Charles was the one that truly grasped my attention - I didn't see that coming. That was different and impressive.

3) Character Progression/Development
This is the best pro trait, I think. Especially Lulu's; he's still a manipulative bastard, but he's more friendly and trusting (especially to C.C. and Kallen). C.C. suddenly being taken away from his life gave him a newfound sort of perspective on her effect and how he feels for her. Missing her body heat, the smell of pizza, etc. (not that he'll ever tell her, lol)

About C.C. herself... well. I didn't feel that she progressed much until the latter chapters, when she met the Student Council. I suppose there were really no opportunities except for Lulu...

...and Nunnally... and Sayoko... and the BK...

I suppose that what I'm trying to say is that it would've been more believable if you made C.C.'s fluster and bluster gradual instead of the outright spluttering at the start. Hmm.

Other stuff I would like to take note of and/or speculate of (please elaborate if you wish, otherwise this will just bother me for reason):
1) Contrived coincidences, lol
a) Shirley's father not dying
b) V.V. finding Nunnally (how?)

2) Mao - how come he didn't survive? The canon scene was the same as this one...

3) Infinity a hero
I would like to see more of Infinity's effects on the BK and the masses. Maybe the enemies will taunt BK about Infinity. Maybe Lulu made a hero out of her and said that she sacrificed herself to save Zero and the rebellion (otherwise, how would the BK react to Zero coming back after practically abandoning them?). And mayber, the horror, when they retrieve C.C. and encounter her slave-self (they'll go "What did they do to her?!" or something).

Eh.

This fic has so much potential. It's not perfect, but still enjoyable.

Thanks for writing, and I hope you update soon~!

The suspense is killing me. Speaking of killing, after reading this chapter I hope we get a chapter where V.V. gets his just desserts. Personally, I'd love to see Akito keep killing him.

Here's a time travel story that is inspired by R2 Episode: 19 (the infamous Black Knights betrayal), Lost Colors (Rai is in this story) and the stories: The Past, Present, and Future (Kallen is killed), Kallen of the Recurrence (Kallen goes back in time), Ice and Fire (Kallen leads the rebellion as Zero not Lelouch) and Lelouch of the Retribution ("God" forces Lelouch to allow Kallen to take his place as Zero). What if Kallen upon hearing Lelouch say, "Kallen you have to live!" Rolo comes to save Lelouch (canon), but Kallen decides to protect Lelouch instead of walking away, however the traitors interpret this as a sign that Kallen is under Lelouch's Geass and is killed by them, but Rolo still manages to save Lelouch. Cannon still happens (including the Zero Requiem although more so out of Lelouch's grief for Kallen's death. Before Suzaku/Zero kills Lelouch; Lelouch in revenge for Kallen's murder has Kallen's murders put to death on international television). Kallen is sent to C's world and "God" has her watch the events of Lelouch's life; thus she is well aware of everything about the Zero Requiem and Schineziel's plans for world domination. Upon Lelouch's death he is sent to C's world were he meets a enraged Kallen (though not because of the traitors death; in fact she is genuinely glad they've been executed (including Ohgi). Kallen is angry because of the Zero Requiem). "God" offers Both Kallen and Lelouch a chance to go back in time to stop the Ragnarök Connection as well as fix the mistakes of the past. Both Kallen and Lelouch are given the power to restore the memories of the original timeline to anyone within their line of sight (Though Lelouch still retains his original Geass power). Because of Lelouch's tendency to screw up and for Zero Requiem; Kallen forces Lelouch to allow her to take the role of Zero, while he becomes Rai: Zero's second in command (this is accomplished by both Kallen and "God" ganging up on Lelouch). There are Three requests made to "God" (That "God" grants): Lelouch requests that Euphemia be allowed to come with both Kallen and Lelouch (Lelouch's request) if she agrees to join the revolution against Britannia (which Euphie does agree. Euphie in fact has been whaching over Lelouch (she requested this of "God" and is granted) since her death (she has forgiven him for the SAZ massacre) and jumps at the chance to help both Kallen and Lelouch in altering the timeline (Euphie is given the power to restore a persons memories as well at Lelouch's insistence). Kallen requests that her brother Naoto comes with them to change the timeline and is given the power to restore peoples memories ("God" agrees and brings Naoto up to speed). Also Kallen requests that she gain's Lelouch's Geass power (although it still has the exact same drawbacks as Lelouch's power). Naoto, Kallen and Lelouch return one week before the Shinjuku massacre (in this story Naoto dies two days before cannon starts) and Euphie (because of time travel) "awakens" four hours before she meets Suzaku in cannon. (Of note: the Zero Requiem, Shirley Fenette's father's death and the SAZ massacre never occur) Rai (from Lost Colors) makes his appearance and later becomes an integral part of the Black Knights and is permanently loyal to both Kallen and Lelouch (this is of his own free will NOT because of Geass or Lelouch's manipulations because Euphie, Kallen and Naoto stops him). both Kallen and Naoto stop their mother (in this story it's Nagisa Kōzuki) from taking Refrain and later she becomes part of Ashford Academy's housekeeping staff (after she recovers because of Lelouch Geassing a few doctors). Nagisa willingly joins the Black Knights after having her memories restored the first time Kallen comes into contact with her. (Of note: Lelouch, Kallen, Euphie, Nagisa and Naoto survive throughout the entire story). Jeremiah Gottwald memories are restored during the events of Shinjuku (this happens when the main characters corner Jeremiah at the train tracks) and promptly switch's sides (Jeremiah remains a good guy throughout the rest of the story.) Villetta Nu is killed when Lelouch steals her Knightmare in Shinjuku. Kewell Soresi takes Jeremiah's place in cannon (although he still dies exactly as in cannon) as the one to arrest and falsely accuse Suzaku and is disgraced by Kallen/Zero (Kewell from this point on; even after his death will be called Damnation). Suzaku Kururugi joins the Black Knights (his memories being restored as well) after the events of his trial. Lloyd Asplund and Cécile Croomy join the Black Knights (and their memories restored) after Euphie has both of them meet Lelouch discreetly at Ashford Academy. Lelouch restores Nunnally's memories the first chance he gets(because of Kallen). Of note: This story is called "Red Dawn." To anyone who reads my idea please comment on my idea. I wont have time to write this story because of own reasons so I ask that if you do like my story idea please feel free to use it, however if you do us my story; you WILL be restricted to the outline (as well as the story's title) that I have given so far or any other ideas I come up with in the future (although you have free reign with the Student Council. However Shirley Fenette MUST survive at all cost! and most defiantly not become Schineziel's pawn!)