I have just read all of this story in a matter of a few days and my goodness it was beautiful from beginning to end I'd love to see you write short little stories about what happened afterwords, but I'll live also I died laughing when Eugene said "abduct her." by far my favorite part although I'd still love to see Rapunzel's reaction to how babies are actually made. anyway I love your work thank you for this.

So i read this story for hours long and i must say that the conflict that you build is so rich in emotion... I honestly adore this story, but i also furious with so many plot twist that prevent them to be together..
Maybe i just find slightly annoyed by how the conflict is so Edward-centric.

an absolutely priceless one...care to tell me the secret weapon of how you write such MASTERPIECES?

Love the admiration

Love the bit with the smolders! I love rapunzel's feistiness!

except for a few grammatical errors this first chapter was perfect!

lovely story! excellent premise! Gothel's still evil, Eugene still a sweet heart and Rapunzel's a darling! pubthugs are awesome. well written!

So Edward has a daughter? Just out of sheer morbid curiosity, does he keep his wife chained to the wall in the dungeon? It sounds like Rapunzel's likely fate had she married him. And how does he explain Mommy's absence to Aurora?

Rapunzel would never pull a gown over her head. Her hair is 70 feet long.

Just a few comments on the story so far.

It's highly unusual for a prince to do spy work in a neighboring kingdom, because it would be highly unusual that no one knows what the prince looks like. ("That's not Flynn Rider! That's Prince Eugene, everyone knows that!) Which is why it seems strange that they call him Flynn Rider when every one of them should recognize Prince Eugene.

I thought Corona was losing the war? How did they march right up to the capital city and destroy it, killing almost everyone if they were losing? Doesn't sound like they needed Edwards help, unless you're trying to portray him as a brilliant military commander.

Why are the council members referring to the marriage as 'Rider's claim'? Didn't Rapunzel back him up on that claim? Why would they accept the word of a priest they don't know if they won't accept the word of their own princess?

Blameless is better than 'out from the blame'.

A desert is a hot, dry, sandy place with very little rainfall. A dessert is something sweet served at the end of a meal.

Three things:
1) Didn't she have an arranged marriage to Eugene first when she was four?

2) Didn't she blow the engagement when she threw up on him in chapter one?

3) Wouldn't this marriage end the war?

Flynn is a rogue. Rouge is a reddish color.

Oh my gosh! I just finished reading your poahontas story and I just realized you have written some of my favorite Disney fanfictions!