Seriously. This- made- me- cry. It still does. Turgon just lost his mom when they followed Feanor, lost his brother in the battle that followed, lost his sister with that darned Dark Elf, lost his father in a mad faceoff with Morgoth, and now he's lost his other, most beloved brother in the Battle of Unnumbered Tears. Sad. Ah, why can't I put this into words? Fingon crying Turgon's name out when he meant for a battle-cry. Then hearing his voice right before he died. GAH, the relationship here is so heartbreaking, and so is the parting. I could use up all the (ten thousand?) characters allowed for the review and it wouldn't be enough. Not exaggerating. I want this story. *sob sob sob sob sob*

Wow! This can really detail the Nirnaeth Arnoediad. I like how you make your readers really 'feel the moment,' if you know what I mean. Really sad, but that's what makes it great.

Wonderful! A real tear-jerker... *bowsheadinsilenceforFingon*

Hard to say anything new :)

Very good picture of the battle - no heroes in shining armours and great glory, but real dust and blood, chaos and lost.

I'm affraid that the battle might look even more terrible... Although I can't imagin it.

Fingon. One of my favourite characters. I never thought of him such agreeable of fate. I thought he was always the one to protest. But even such revolting spirit must grow up and in this very situation there was no better way to act than agree with fate and fight to make as much harm on enemy as he could...

Turgon. Maybe it was a cry of despair of the one lost in the battle but I'm sure there was a love between them even if they were not close.

In 'The Silmarillion' Turgon wants to fight Gothmog after seeing Fingon's death and Huor stops him. You gave Turgon his own motivation to survive the battle - beloved daughter awaiting in his white city :) In the end he was wise enough to give it up and chose the escape to live and guide his people than to make suicidal attempt to kill his brother's murder.

As previous reviewers I also liked the fleshbacks and the ending when Fingon could hear his brother's voice before he died :)

Great job :)

Read this months ago, but I just didn't know what to say about such a fic. Hopefully I can do justice to it now. I agree with what others have said, it's good to see the bond between Fingon and Turgon. You've written both characters vividly and brilliantly.

this is so good! So sad,so well-written, and I lvoe the fact that you actually know what you're writing about, unlike a great deal of LOTR fanficcers... oh well.

Excellent fic. Urgh... so sad though.

Sob!

Definitly in tears now. The Nirnaeth is the best scene Tolkein ever made me imagine -and the saddest. It's so depressing.

Go Fingon! Valiant indeed.

Go Turgon! No less so, even if he never chopped off his cousin's hand.

I like their memories of the good and bad things.

And this has definitly not been coherent, but I'm crying here. Bear with me. I really liked it.

Cheers,

~Lil

This is one of the saddest and most beautiful pieces you've written. It may have been a comfort for Fingon to hear his brother's voice answering him in his mind, during the last moments of his life - but who comforted Turgon when his later calls went unanswered? No wonder he clung so to Gondolin in the end, as it was all he had left in Middle-earth.

One of the elements lacking in The Silmarillion is the impression of real affection and love between Finwë's descendants - the only strong emotions that are described are those of hate between the sons of Fëanor and their cousins. This makes tragedies such as the Nirnaeth Arnoediad hard to grasp. Your story brings that battle closer to the heart as the death of Fingon becomes not just the death of a warrior but of someone's beloved brother - very poignant.

Very well-described battle sequence. Well described enough to be upsetting, which is the point. I was certainly in tears by the end. The style is very appropriate to Tolkien. And I very muc like the use of flashbacks.

I hadn't thought of these brothers as particularly close, and i suppose even here they aren't, but they are brothers after all. Like Finch, i am glad to hear that Fingon wasn't alone at the end.

Good battle description. And inevitably sad. To be parted like that... I'm glad Fingon didn't die all alone, but with his brother's voice in his ears. And it's easy to imagine why Turgon, after this parting, did not want to be parted from his beloved city (again).